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Needs some work.
I Don't Think So
Just had to note my opinion---I am not into these women who hate men and have to dominate them. If you hate them so much leave them alone instead of doing something so illegal as assault and administering drugs. All this on a guy who this girl didn't even know. Another point in this story is the guy just loves that 10 inch strap on up his butt. I DON'T THINK SO.
Needs SOME work?
Needs ALOT of work. You aren't able to handle ass fucking THAT easily, it takes time to build up, especially to a freaking 10 inch strapon.
potential
Needs more back story, more dialogue and to slow down just a bit.
What was the rush to throw fingers and a dildo up his ass? At least have her torment him longer, get her pleasure out of it and then jump to something she does to humiliate and subjugate him.
Keep writing though, wasn't terrible.
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