I enjoyed this story segment. It's an excellent starting chapter. You've developed the narrator as an interesting vibrant character and I liked how you took your time getting this going. I look forward to more.
… to have a believable, slow build-up to a story. Of the stories I've read - or tried to - lately, many have been far too much the "wham bam, thank you ma'am" type. Looking forward to many more chapters from you.
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Good pacing
I enjoyed this story segment. It's an excellent starting chapter. You've developed the narrator as an interesting vibrant character and I liked how you took your time getting this going. I look forward to more.
More...
...please! Got my attention and left me wanting the story to continue.
Looking forward to the next chapter
Very good story so far!
great read
keep going, nice story, hope to read chapter 2 soon.
Makes a nice change ...
… to have a believable, slow build-up to a story. Of the stories I've read - or tried to - lately, many have been far too much the "wham bam, thank you ma'am" type. Looking forward to many more chapters from you.
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