That's what I call a well integrated but unfortunately too short a short story.
What I mean by well-integrated: the interweaving of real-time action with the real-time thinking/dreaming of the .. um .. "heroine".
Looks like I'll have to take a look at all your other contributions.
You did make one factual error:
"I check that the cash is in the envelope and quickly dress"
Unless it's a trusted regular, check the money FIRST, not afterwards.
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well done
That's what I call a well integrated but unfortunately too short a short story.
What I mean by well-integrated: the interweaving of real-time action with the real-time thinking/dreaming of the .. um .. "heroine".
Looks like I'll have to take a look at all your other contributions.
You did make one factual error:
"I check that the cash is in the envelope and quickly dress"
Unless it's a trusted regular, check the money FIRST, not afterwards.
Just terrible
A "1". Enough said.
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