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Second time through...
I hate it when an author incorporates a big breakthrough on the part of the characters and then takes it all away moments later.
great story
Nice. I enjoyed this story as a story. The sexual tensions that you played with and the mood of constant apprehension you created was delicious. You write good. I think the characters were interesting and well developed. I was very sympathetic to our narrator in particular, but I sometimes wonder why the heroes of these stories are always so feckless; they all seem to have cocks, but no balls. But I guess if it weren’t that way, we wouldn’t have a story. I appreciate that Ty wasn’t the stereotypical arrogant Black bull we so often find in these stories. His elephantine proportions might be called into question, but, after having served in the Army for four years in the company of Black men, I can tell you it’s no stereotype. (I think God was very unfair to us White guys.) Jill, of course, was the most delightful character of them all: pretty, intelligent, level-headed and takes initiative, but also conniving and manipulative. Going behind her husband’s back to teach him a lesion about the difference between fact and fantasy? I admire her scruples, but as a side effect, she now has something with Ty that she doesn’t share with her husband. Jill has emerged as the dominant player in this marriage, and hubby had better look out for his personal autonomy going forward. Although I recommend I that you leave it up to my imagination, it would be interesting to see what the next bet will be like. Will Ty remember he’s a gentleman when he proposes the next terms? (He sure forgot when he made Jill wear all those Duke outfits.) And will Jill’s scruples be able to withstand her competitive nature? There’s a lot of shit three people can get into without actually having sex.
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