Never Bet with your Heart Ch. 05

Anon

I'm glad it ended that way, It was one of the few stories that I've read that resonated with some kind of practical honesty, its something that many authors seem to forget, there are fantasy's and there is reality.

Loved it

A great ending to a dangerous tale. Please, no more bets.

Retard

That husband is a ball-less douche, he was only lucky he had such a good wife and an understanding friend, (though that friend openly admits to having the hots for the wife.) he is and will always be a stupid wimp with no gonads... Good to see this didn't have the flow on affect your other stories had.

Please finish the madness

Before our eyes bleed to death

Stupid bet

betting on relationship always have been the American way,not wise.

wow how do u know it wasnt of him fucking your wife previously?

why would u keep u relationships with a guy who was going to cuck u?
can u understand the concept of mentally defective, all three of you!

and this is of course an IR story.

Wtf

Dudes a wimp..its obivous the wife is a lying slut!

Piece of shit story.

It took a piece of shit to write it, put this dogg turd in interracial, asshole.

Dear Anonymous you love dog tards

you read all these stories while eating pig tards and licking donkey dicks!!!

Fooled me

I don't often get fooled by plot twists here but I was this time. Very clever way to wake his ass up without cheating. I don't believe as some of the anondiots and think she could have raced from anywhere in the world in a minute or so. That's just looking to bash an author no matter what. For having short chapters I felt you did a good job at capturing the reader's attention each time.

5*

Have you noticed how crazy the un/under-employed losers get when the wife does NOT cheat? Really yanks their limp little pee-pee's (if you could get a hold of something that small to yank).

Keep writing and ignore the yapping of the LW chihuahuas.

Plausible

Nicely written. Good job. Did hubby learn his lesson?

Good ending

I want to strangle him for letting this get as far as it did but in the end she was a truly loving wife. Refreshing.

Love it

You had me hanging til the last minute. Great storytelling, great!

Great story!!

The thing is...this fantasy will only get stronger for him, and I would suspect for her too. He will think about what he saw Ty doing to this other woman and will always be thinking how hot it would be if it really were his wife. Thinking that it would hurt a lot, but how erotic it would be if it really were her. He will forever want it to really be her getting fucked like that in front of him. This I think would be the true reality of it. He will alway wish the opportunity will come up again and that it will happen with him there to experience it with her! Very well written...Thank you for sharing your story.

Refreshing

It is very moving to read a story that has a BTB feel to it and to be rewarded with one showing compassion, understanding (if not renewed trust), and resolve. I want to believe that I could reach the same results if confronted with the same dilemma.
Thanks for this very fine effort.

One more thought . . .

Some of these commentators are committing the ole slippery slope fallacy. Just because a couple indulges in fantasy play, does not necessarily mean that it is inevitable that it ends in total debauchery. Fantasies can be dangerous when they first emerge, but in the case of this couple they discovered in a very impactful way what their boundaries and limitations were. This loving wife brilliantly orchestrated the circumstances to force her hubby into realizing what he really wanted, or didn't want. I think depending on his reply text, she may have divorced his perverted ass.

Nice twist

on a frequently used plot.

Nice Save!!!!

You pulled off a Good One!

AND, he's lucky to have her!!!

Congratulations!

You led us right up to the moment of impact (referring to my earlier train wreck analogy) and then semi-resolved the conflict. You broke the stereotypes used in your earlier stories. You showed us the mechanics of the seduction (actually, the husband's flagrant disregard for his marriage) in anticipation of the infidelity. You showed us that you were ready to deal with the aftermath of adultery for the first time. And you tied several elements together in your resolution, namely, the bets, the cheerleader outfit, the website, and Jill's taunting/testing of her husband.

I wonder if you had this "ending" planned all along, or if you are responding to criticism or suggestions from other writers.

Frankly, though, I felt this episode was rushed, especially after all the buildup. Maybe you were using the absence of detail and dialogue to demonstrate the Unnamed Tarheel's lack of concentration, but if so you overdid it. If the guy is going through heartbreak, a 10-minute romp between his wife and his rival feels like all night, not the other way around.

Okay, Ty may be a stereotyped athlete, but you made him professional enough not to steal his friend and subordinate's wife.

Jill is still hot for Ty, but she won't be the one to break up the marriage that simply. For now she is content to stay his dream lover, so long as he can still be hers.

The Unnamed Tarheel still loathes himself, is even more convinced of Ty's sexual superiority and knows that Jill will be introduced to heaven if Ty ever touches her. He has viewed life without his woman and is now even less confident in himself than before, though he at least hasn't given up on himself yet. Jill has helped him realize how permanent the damage will be when he finally pushes her into Ty's arms. Because when this Tarheel babe goes Duke, she'll never come back.

Sooooo, will I ever get to read an account of how this petite blond babe named Jill gets her brains f**** out?

Great twist.... Since its a STORY, will u continue with a juicier plot twist?

Loved the story. Loved the end twist. Especially like the writing!!
I hope u write more!
If u care to continue this..... Let the couple obsess over the fantasy until they approach Ty about a real show. Then have her wear a mask and talk to the camera teasing her hubby about how good Ty is.
Option 2. A good-looking guy at jills work recognized her from before. Saw the vid, thinking it was her, and tells her how much he enjoyed it, wants his turn, hints of exposing her. She has the hots for him and gives in to his advances, arranges a mtg with hubby to get things in the open. He gets hubby fantasizing and blackmails Jill to cuck hubby(Jill is torn and doesn't put up too much of a fight).
Ty splits from gf, jill consoles him, finds out she was blackmailed. Ty beats the guy up, and hubby lets Jill reward Ty with a bet that is followed through. Jill looses so 1 week, Jill moves in with Ty and Ty's bedroom is on a private cam. Hubby watches all, Jill txt teases during day. At weeks end, Hubby is given option for Jill to return or spend 2 more weeks Jill is judge and uses same test as before.. Hubby's dick chooses 2 more weeks and Jill stays.
Just a few plot line suggestions for a STORY. It's all for good fun!!
Thanks for writing!!!!

Good save and thanks for doing something different then your norm. That is to be commended. I still have trouble with the hubbys who are so afraid of their own shadow they can't even make a decision one way or the other. It's kind of a shame this man had to have this happen. The wife is awesome and he is very lucky she is an honorable woman..........so far! You could ask the hubby if 2+2=4 and he would have to ask his wife to make sure she was happy with his answer. It's hard for me empathize with anything a super weak man like this does but I enjoyed this chapter.

are all the readers fucking idiots?

its simple. Have the video checked and enlarged... and check the time stamp.

she is not telling the truth

To HarryinVa

Since she had his permission to go with Ty, what reason would she have to set up an elaborate delayed video in an attempt to deceive him? Ockham's Razor . . . The simplest explanation is that she set it up to make him realize how wrong it would be. Take the author at his word. It is just a story.

Great Story ... Hope you consider more chapters

I like the suggestions given by wingman. Especially about the "black" coworker blackmailing her.

Cute twist!

The old warning still applies..."Be careful what you wish for, because you just MIGHT get it!" This story documents that old maxim as well as any. Good work! Not great, the Bull's dick is too stereotyped, as is his sexual appetite and prowess...but it WAS good, and THAT ain't bad!

Thank you, and Please...

ignore the simpletons who can't seem to separate reality and fantasy. There's a certain contract that the reader has to accept with the author--the transaction requires some suspension of disbelief. Obviously, there is a certain population of reader who can't/won't suspend their disbelief, and then want to bitch that the story didn't meet their narrowly proscribed ideal of who a man should be. Some men are easily intimidated; some men can't find the words they want to say (which seemed to be your hero's particular issue); some men don't know what they want. And just because these readers haven't met a guy like that, or can't imagine a guy being like that, makes those characterizations no less valid. So...please don't be deterred by the chuckleheads who can't seem to figure out that maybe they shouldn't read stories they don't relate to. (More likely they do and can't admit it, but that's a whole other problem for them.)
I liked the resolution of this story. I didn't understand why the husband wouldn't just leave her a text message saying "don't go," but you did suggest that he simply couldn't find his words. But I liked the erotic tension and the spiraling circumstances.

Option two from Wingman above!!

Excellent

Very well done, MonkeyTail. The setup and tension-building was great throughout the chapters, and the climax increased it very well. Kudos. I disagree with those clamoring for another chapter. This story stands well where it is.

Therapy

I swear some of the people who comment on these stories need to log off of their computers and find a therapist. If they are married I really feel bad for their wives. This wife didn't cheat, but they are so demented and jaded that they start making up plots and adding them to the story. Its like they want all wives to cheat. One commenter (Anonymous of course) said that she cheated and taped it on an earlier date for an alibi. Why would she do this when she could have just fucked him without taping it? She wouldn't even need an alibi if she already got away with it. Checking the time stamp would be stupid because if she wanted to get away with it, she wouldn't tape herself and text her hubby to tell him to watch. I swear people, I really think that you guys need to seek some help, because whoever ruined you did a good job. And for the love of God, don't have kids.

I for one loved the story. I'm glad that you kept her faithful to her husband. I'm glad that you made the husband learn a lesson and value his wife more. Great job. Best series I've read thus far.

Very well done indeed

This is a really excellent story, very well told – and highly erotic. Of all the stories I have read on Literotica, this comes in at Number 2 - and I have a very strong suspicion that the Number 1 story was written by the same author under a different name. There are just too many similarities in the style.

Most stories on this site are pure wish fulfilment, be it fucking , vengeance or whatever. The majority of those stories take no account of how people actually could think, behave or react in these situations. Almost without exception the women are totally unbelievable.

This is one of the small group of stories that realistically work through believable character and logical plot to examine serious issues surrounding sex. In this case: what kinds of fantasy should we indulge in and whether or not we should actually do what we fantasise about.

The husband’s apparent wimpishness is more explicable in the light of his wife being highly excited by the thought of being fucked by Ty. The husband has reasonable cause to suspect that she wants to actually do it. I do not know about other people, but for me, supporting my wife in something she really wants to do (in her case ride horses) is a foundation of the marriage. That creates a dilemma if what she wants to do is something illegal (e.g. rob banks), highly unethical (e.g. write disgusting comments in Literotica) or something highly damaging to the marriage (e.g. fuck Ty). That is a genuine dilemma. His being highly aroused by it intensifies the dilemma and confuses it for him.

For me the key section in this series is in Chapter 4:-
"I trust you," I said.

"That's it?" Jill said. "So you are putting all of this on me?"

"No, that's not what I meant," I stammered

What did he mean? He did trust her and as it turns out, he was correct to do so. That he made a bit of a balls up of the situation is hardly surprising – we all do from time to time.

Taking this fiction as being real, they have as good a chance as most couples of making their marriage now work. Infidelity is far from the only thing that destroys marriages and makes them sterile. Indeed, it is probably relatively low on the list, despite its massive impact.

In particular, despite the impasse the husband found himself in here, the two of them appear to communicate better than many couples on sex and everything else. You do not need to be a psychologist to know that for many couples, after a few years, it is extremely hard to talk outside the established ruts.

There are tiny blips on plot and characterisation but they are not worth raising here. They do not stop all five chapters being 5* in my judgement.

Congratulations & please continue turning out thought provoking stories of this quality.

Will there be other chapters?

Love the story so far. Please tell us that there will be more?

EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Congratulations!!!!!!!!

Excellent story!!!

Yes, it was a good plot twist. But there was nothing "erotic" about it. The main character did not get Fu**ed and I am pretty sure many of us were looking forward to it.

It was... different. But in the end, just felt a little hollow to me.

Good writing though.

Brilliant.

Absolutely Unbelievably Awesome SEries. Great Ending.

Nope - didn't believe it

Your twist at the end. The whole story was flat. I never really cared one way or the other about any of the characters. But I didn't believe Jill. I think she screwed Ty. Because that's how all these wimpy husband/stupid bets stories run. And of course it had to be a black man. How totally cliche. This story rates a "1".

Great story

Personally, you don't see a lot of 'twists' in erotic stories, so I found that a good decision. I also appreciate that the characters stay true through out the chapters. I'll admit, it was a bit lacking in "sex" but there are a million plus stories out there like that.

would have written as long story

5 chapters r like 5 pages

keep writing long stories

ur style of writing z erotic

5 stars

A story with no cheating... the husband was an idiot with his foolish fantasies I am glad the wife was not and snapped him back into reality and their marriage. Well done. I think a final chapter is in order. My opinion, both Jill and her husband goto the game, then go home and have babies, live happily ever after... I love no cheating stories.. don't like them... I really enjoyed this story.. just finalize it with a last chapter happily ever after... sounds corny but.. that is after all what marriage is all about

Let her go to Ty

She's lying to him. He needs to wake up and smell the roses. She is a cheating cunt, lying through her teeth. Just another wimpy cuckold story.

good story!

good writing - very erotic

Another sad case of not communicating!

She could talk with her fantasy man TY, but not her husband?? BS. Definitely not a truly loving wife.

Very Good

Though the end was a bit disappointing. You didn't give in to the angry commentors from previous chapters, did you? You're a good story teller, so I hope you keep on writing

Hah!

LMFAO at the last post.

Loved the series.

Wonderful ending, very original.

I love that woman

and he needs to really appreciate her. You had me on pins and needles for 4 chapters and this wonderful ending. The writing was compelling and the storyline superb.

Thank you.

Very good

Very good, kept me on the edge until the very end

I'm glad I found

this cute little story. Also glad the author did not drag out the last chapter. I had not thought of this ending, but it became clear when he never saw Jill's face.

No More Bets With Ty!

If they know what's good for their marriage,there should be no more bets with Ty!
You play with fire,eventually you're gonna get burned!

best you have written.

This story has a good twist to it. Fantasy should never become reality. The wife forced the issue very well. She remained loyal, while he dithered. There has to be a lesson there. Well done!

On another note, this is so much better than your latest "10th Anniversary" in 2016. That wife was totally out of line, and the marriage is headed for divorce. He should have stopped what he could, but she had chosen her path already, with someone 20 years younger than herself(?). Your Ch. 4 will end the marriage completely, if Tommy and his roommates shared her.