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Excellent story
Really enjoyed it and found it very horny. Can't wait to read some more.
Pathetic
Sick and disgusting.
To Anonymous From The Author
Then do not reed it. This story may not appeal to everyone, but it does to some. If you do not have anything nice to say, please do not post on my stories. I welcome constructive criticism as well.
Thanks,
TheNaughtyWife
Nice anal :)
was a fun read... would love to have my wife fuck me with a toy, too!
Hoping
I hope to see more chapters of this. Great start.
Constructive
Constructive criticism: please check spelling (example: pussy whole should be hole); slow down and let the story develop (Leo and Torri burst into the picture and wham bang she's opening her legs wide for Jenni without even a handshake of introduction; the two men are told to get their cocks hard but Johnny has already been described as "rock hard."). Detailed descriptions are not needed but a little would help viz fat or thin, tall or short, busty or slim hipped, blonde or bald.
Positives: the idea of surprising Jenni is fine and the possibilities for further adventures is tantalizing.
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