Not bad but it needed to be longer .Not much of a fan of the one page stories . It's a really good story and I hope you plan to add to it . Keep writing and I'll keep reading . Thanks dutch513 .
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Anonymous07/31/13
Excellent!
A well-packed episode....and I especially appreciate its brevity.
I hope you continue on with this story! I agree that it would be better if it was longer. But I still loved it. 5 stars!
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Anonymous08/01/13
So very well written. You can just so feel the lust and emotion. It was a hell of a tease them not going further this time but it's a good reason for part 2. I'll be reading it!
Instant hard on....can't wait for Chapter 2 and beyond
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Anonymous08/01/13
Wow
Very well written and I love the story. I hope there are some true aspects of it. I had a similar experience with my sister. Email me if you want to discuss it. Hou Tx m30 at g mail dott com.
Great job....I'm looking forward to reading the next continuation of this story.
It left me very wet...Thank you!
Kisses, Gia
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Anonymous08/01/13
LOVE IT!
I will admit that I wish it was longer. ONLY because it is so very well written and enticing! It left me hungry for more! SO PLEASE CONTINUE WITH CHAPTER 2 QUICK!!!1
English
Not Bad
Not bad but it needed to be longer .Not much of a fan of the one page stories . It's a really good story and I hope you plan to add to it . Keep writing and I'll keep reading . Thanks dutch513 .
Excellent!
A well-packed episode....and I especially appreciate its brevity.
hot
hot and well written...could feel the emotions you were feeling and the lust.....part 2 soon please......
Keep writing
Your writing has depth. The complaints are from "strokers."
Liked it
I like it and I would definitely read more. I like the addition of the BDSM. I actually think that works well in some incest stories.
Really good!
I hope you continue on with this story! I agree that it would be better if it was longer. But I still loved it. 5 stars!
So very well written. You can just so feel the lust and emotion. It was a hell of a tease them not going further this time but it's a good reason for part 2. I'll be reading it!
Need Chapter 2
Instant hard on....can't wait for Chapter 2 and beyond
Wow
Very well written and I love the story. I hope there are some true aspects of it. I had a similar experience with my sister. Email me if you want to discuss it. Hou Tx m30 at g mail dott com.
Great story!
Great job....I'm looking forward to reading the next continuation of this story.
It left me very wet...Thank you!
Kisses, Gia
LOVE IT!
I will admit that I wish it was longer. ONLY because it is so very well written and enticing! It left me hungry for more! SO PLEASE CONTINUE WITH CHAPTER 2 QUICK!!!1
can't wait for the upcoming chapters
Great start...made me hard
love to taste her finger
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