All Comments on 'Magic'

by EducatedOwl

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HarryHillHarryHillover 10 years ago
Loved the first 6 stanza

Should have ended there (disclaimer) would have been unspoken magic. 5*

AngelineAngelineover 10 years ago
Really strong writing here and captivating images

though I agree with Harry, it's too long to hold all but really dedicated readers. There are some little things I might do differently, too, like get rid of some of the "ands" and other words that seem extraneous to me. But that may just reflect my preference. The images really grab the reader, love that.

Thanks for sharing it. :-)

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellover 10 years ago
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Bravo! I love it and it held me to the end with all the stanzas!

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago
Just.....

.....to say I was here and enjoyed your poem.

KatieJonesKatieJonesover 10 years ago

Loved this, "When you kiss me I wonder Are you trying To reclaim something lost To fill the awkward silence" and the juxtaposition of the two 'times" in the same setting!

todski28todski28over 10 years ago
I like the time travel you have linked together

I feel the final verse gives closure to the piece. Almost like closing a book and snapping back to reality.

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