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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/03/13

Lack of proofreading

The story switches tense: the switch is the paragraph starting 'Everett begins'. There are a number of minor grammatical errors, e.g. 'the woman and the front desk' should be 'the woman at the front desk'

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by unknownlovers10/13/13

My apologies

My apologies. I suppose it wasn't as thought out as I thought. Good eye.

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