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It's an excellent poem
and I am pretty sure I know the town you're writing about, but to me the East Coast feel of the poem filled me with memory. You have such strength in your eye for detail and ability to paint a picture that comes to life. I'm not sure how I feel about the last two lines--mainly cause I love the last line that comes before them and feel it's a stronger place to end. But that's just me. Loved reading it (a bunch of times by now!).
I felt.....
....this didn't get its dues in the summer challenge. I see Old Orchard Beach teeming with Quebecois. You bring out the scents and sounds of a seaside resort teeming with life. I think you could discard the last lines, ".....know exactly what a summer fling is all about" is final enough.
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You have a gift for painting a moving picture with words, so that I who has never visited an American seaside resort can still see it perfectly.and yes I think the end of the 3rd stanza is enough.
Agreed
Yeah, I was unsure about that line, so I think you ladies are correct. (Thanks for affirming what I suspected. *g*) I have submitted an edited version to remove that line.
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