All Comments on 'Movie Day'

What did you do? Write random sentences and cut and paste them together into even more random paragraphs?

"I have waist length curly hair, green eyes and curly hair. I'm mixed so my skin is what Estee Lauder calls "Sun up Beige" I have big tits. 34 DD and the ass of a porn star. Speaking of asses Jan's ass is so perfect."

It looks like you ran your story through a paper shredder and didn't bother to organize the scraps before posting them online. Wish you'd left them in the shredder.

Some people need to feel better about themselves by cutting other people down. I hope you are working on chapter 2.

Great story really hot I'd love to see it continued.

Can there be a part 2? Where Jan finds our Summer’s crush,