All Comments on 'New Beginnings: Bob and Jolynn Ch. 01'

Don't really draw the reader in do you? I was bored with it before I was half way down the page, I get that its supposed to be romance but come on!

Enjoyed your story.........and please ignore the previous anonymous poster

I love it and I'm waiting for the next part.

enjoyed your story cannot wait for the next instalment in view of the prevoius about annon comments

James UK

A really good story line written with knowledge and thoughfullness it has passion, very believable characters, love in abundance and heart warming. I am looking forward to the whole story

J. A UK reader

WOW!!! If this was the first chapter, I can't wait to read the book! Outstanding development of characters, plot-line and your command of dialogue is to be commended. Your characters are totally real, and I wish I lived near or worked with them . PLEASE provide the next chapter soon (like Tomorrow!). (Watch for comment from SeaBassKit)

KInd of got to agree with "anonymous" it did kind of drag on and get a bit boring. I skipped a few pages and read last few, it was either that or skip to end and give it a 1 out of 5.

Loved your other series ... and this has a great start to it. Looking forward to the next 10 or so chapters (we need to meet her folks, go through the de-virginization, etc., etc.). Fantastic writing ... you are a favorite of mine.

My wife and I have lived monogamously for more than 50 years, and I can understand only such relationships

all the rambling wrecks are not from Georgia, TK U MLJ LV NV

At first I thought that this story looked like it was too long ,but I realize that was just to set up the story line. After every page I could hardly wait to get to the next page. You brought life to the story, not just quickie stuff, and I have to praise you for making this story real for me and I look forward to further editions of their story.

So, thank you again and I look forward to chapter 2.

cant wait for the next installment. hopes it comes along soon

Great story, am loving reading it.

Cannot wait to see how it unfolds with Nikki and Lissa

Great job, nice build-up, can't wait until the next installment!

Long - very long - but well worth the time to read and ENJOY.

Best story to ever come out of Texas.

Sensitive, caring & compasionate from beginning to end. Well worth the time to read. Reminded me of what is needed to be in love and show that love to every one.

Looking forward to the continuation.

No one else was bothered by the groping of a underage girls boob by an adult?

Great Story! The fact that it's also set in an area of Texas that is just down the road from me, is a plus. I hope to see additional chapters soon. Thanks for all your efforts!

This is a well written tale that drew me into the story. More, please.

and you really need a proof reader.

Sometimes It was impossible to know who was speaking. Names changed freely from page to page. Whole words were left out or misspelled. I hate having to go back to reread a passage to figure out what is meant.

And don't even get me started on the premise. Believable? NOT!

When are we going to read the next chapter.

Good story, are we going to se a follow up?

please finish this. i am hooked.

Please don't forget...

And if you are not going to finish it, please let us know!

I sure hope that you continue this story. I had little difficulty following the embedded conversation - only once or twice did I need to re-read to figure out who said what.

I think CH1 painted a really nice background canvass for the rest of the story, which I truly hope will continue. I do plan to check back on occasion to look for new chapters. Thumbs up from me!

Please let us have the rest of the story, it's to good to end here.

Love this first chapter, this is the second story of yours that I have read today, Seriously hope to see more additions soon.

You really need to follow this up with another chapter or two. The next one would be great for the rest of the week-end with Nikki etc. and Chapter three for the "Date" with Lissa.

This story just has to continue.

George in Omaha

This story deserves to be finished - it's one of the best you have written but you have left us with too many open ended plot lines, and it so needs to be finished. If you can't or won't finish it please at least let us know.

I love the way the narrative between your two main characters plays out.

Andyhm

please don't be one of those that leaves an excellent story hanging...

Another great one...just please, please finish it. Soon......

5* this is a great story, please finish it.

A fantastic story thats only just in its infancy. Cant wait to hear about bobs first meeting with nikki and also bobs taking of lissas virginity. So come on put us all out of out misery and post the next installment as soon as possible.

Hoping for more!

You mostly take your stories further. A lot of directions to pursue, unless you burned out.

Is there going to be a second (or more) chapter?

I know it has been a while since this was posted but it really needs to be continued. The story is ripe for development. If you are done with it, have someone else take it up and run with it. Please finish this story line!

chapters galore for this couple, TK U MLJ LV NV

As of this time I have read about half of your postings and have not been disappointed. This is an excellent story and written very well. I truly hope you continue with further chapters.

here it is two years later

and we are still waiting for a resolution

please, please

help us solve the mysteries herein

One if your best, please continue with part 2, 3, 4,... Don't think we could get tired of the story or the characters you have developed so well.

Please when can we expect more of this - chapter one was a good start but need the rest particularly as I have just about read every other ones of your writings on here

Would love to hear the rest of this storie, when and if you finish

Waiting for follow up. Hope to see it.

Great story! Now just finish it please!

Very surprised to reach the end of the story and find that it is obviously not the end. Look forward to (using the catch phrase of Paul Harvey} "the rest of the story". Thank you for this and your other stories. I ran across "And The Horse You Rode In On" as a similar story, following a different authors tale, and have been working through your offerings since. That does not mean to imply reading your stories is a chore, I have enjoyed all of them so far and liked some very much. Thank you for sharing your imagination with your audience.

Going to finish this, right? I know you are still writing...this is a classic that needs to continue and be completed. Don't leave us hanging!

I have enjoyed the story so far, and I truly look forward to the next chapter.

Ready for the next.chapter(s). Love what was done so far.

I have enjoyed the story so far and can see several possibilities for the sequel(s). It would be a crime not to bring this story further along. Thanks for the first installment

Are you going to release chapter 2. Lot of good threads that need to be tied together!!

To have read this far into the story and be left hanging makes it feel that I have wasted my time and commitment. Please, please finish it or deduct the 5 stars I gave it!

Richard May

Agree with many reviewer comments

Great story... lots of threads and options

Would love to see next / last part of the story

Stop teasing

Okay, I REALLY liked this story! However, you need to finish it. Four stars for now; 5 and a favorite if you finish it. Please?!

Just finished reading this first part of the story for a second time. It remains one of my all-time favorites.

There's so much more to tell, and I'm hoping (like many others) that you can find the motivation and energy to continue with it.

It is probably safe to assume it has been abandoned.

.......a degree in English..........

..........and are a genius in manufacturing flow and operations

Did you misspell Engineering maybe?

I’m going through reading all of your stories. I just finished this one and rated it 5-Stars. I, for one, would really like to see you continue New Beginnings: Bob and Jolynn Ch. 01 with chapters 2-???. Very well written and enjoyable. Thanks.

This is a story that needs to be continued, is that something you will do?

Great read sofar, i really hope you plan to continue, lots of potential. Much appreciation from a fan of your writing.

I was surprised at how it started but it really worked. I am anxious for more!

That even after 5 years there is no chapter 2. I like it 5*****

Please oh please finish this story! There are so many plots & sub plots that need to be completed!

WOW. Could not stop reading

Please work on this one! I love it!

Your writing is captivating!!! Please complete this....

Better be careful with Bob's harem. Last guy with a harem in Texas (Waco iirc)ran into a spot of trouble with the Feds.

Found

On

Roadside

Dead

😉

Please add more, it isn't finished!

I agree with people we need a follow up on this story

First time reader of your stories. Love your style and the "Captivating" story lines. Please consider adding more to Bob and Jolynn's story I'm sure I am not the first nor will i be the the last in this request.

That’s a pretty good story. But that’s certainly no way to end it. There has to be more. Right?

Thank you for this great start , but it is just a long teaser. It needed a good bit of editing and proofreading, but your later work shows improvement. You really need to let Bob and Jolynn tell more of their great story.

detroitdave

It’s a very good start but there’s more to the story and it needs to be told. So please, TFB, give us “the rest of the story”, soon.

This is the BEGINNING (I hope) of a great novel. There is no conflict, no violence, no evil intent but that is exactly the fiction that I like and crave. There are just a lot of nice people growing to know each other and to help each other. I know that is opposed to the teachings of the English Departments of the finest school, but that is still what I search for. I am 76 years old and I have seen too much hate, violence and destruction in my life; When I read for leisure I want something that makes me feel good and restores my faith that there are still nice, good people in the world.

Overall I like most of your work, but I really liked this one. After this long I realize that you have no intention of expanding this story, but I really wish you would change your mind. Once again, a truly magnificent jewel.

I like this one. I've red most of your story but I wanna ask if you could continue and finish this one. It can't end here.

Waiting for chapter 2.

When can we expect the next chapter? I see two more chapters, hopefully soon.

NUff said

next chapter?

how long do we have to wait. Please not too long.!!!

This is a beautiful story with great potential. It cries out to be completed.

please please complete it

Great story where's the rest ?

I cannot believe you ripped this novel in half and burned the second half so we could not finish reading it. Lol. I hope you are well and that this message finds you safe. Take care FarmBoy!

I don’t know, I think if you left out most of the innuendo, double entendre one-liners that this story would be about five pages long. I liked the basic story line, I really wish the author had given us another chapter. Or two. But I do think the story could have been a lot tighter if a lot of the fluff had been left out. And it’s been nearly ten years since this first chapter was posted so I’ve pretty much given up hope for more of it.

Every writer should read his or her stuff out loud before declaring it finished. That won’t resolve your problem with homonyms (“passed” and “past,” for example), but it would help you with the odd construction or missing words. … Someone once said to ignore everything before the word “but.” So here goes … There were some problems with this, but wow, what a story. Spicy enough to keep it out of the Hallmark movie genre and and delightful enough for any rom-com aficionado. 5 stars. Now finish it, or somebody’s going to have to do it for you!

You got me. I'm stuck on this story. Keep me laughing please?

I seem to find authors I like only to discover they stopped posting new stories — and leave sequels to our imagination.

Please write the next chapter great story

I have really enjoyed reading your work you are a great writer

Lovely storey, please can you post the next chapter. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Captivating. This Story was posted on 6th August'13. Too much waiting for the next Part. Hope Author will oblige us Poor Readers & relieve our tension. Regards-

I liked the story. It moved a little fast for some people but I knew the first I met my wife that we were destined to be together for the rest of our lives. When are we going to here the rest of the story?

Ended way too soon!!! This one had at least 5-10 more chapters before it could be wrapped up!!

Been reading all your stuff and enjoying it, but stunned this was left off there… 😢