Family History

Absolutely heart wrenching

Such a tale diluted into sparse words. I love this piece, in all its ending sadness, but you live with them as you read and know that there was a good life before.

I too like the sparse language. It fits so well and moves so quickly as does life.

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greenmountaineer

This is lovely, fragile and heartbreaking

It's interesting how so few well chosen words can read as volumes on a family history. A good poem, a definite 5.

Only one suggestion that is to drop the words "Pt 1-6" as they're extraneous words and not needed, just leave it with the years.

Read to the end, with my inevitable frown as jesus was mentioned

I liked it. I think, (disclaimer), the whole thing is a wheel, turning on this axle:

Family comes
Loons call
Fish jump
Children laugh

An interesting....

....approach that works well. Nostalgia, emotion, empathy all present. A keeper/

well worth

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