Overall I like the story but its a bit slow moving. Maybe you could do 2 pages instead of one. And Lynne is starting to get slightly annoying but I guess that's because she is so naive. But keep up the writing because I am still reading.
and tell him what he needs to hear--they can take it slow and get to know one another. If she pushes him away, Leif will start sleeping around and that will be THE END.
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Oooooo-Kayyyy
So started reading at ch. 11 and I'm hooked. I like a funny hit steamy romance....but not mice.
Slow moving
Overall I like the story but its a bit slow moving. Maybe you could do 2 pages instead of one. And Lynne is starting to get slightly annoying but I guess that's because she is so naive. But keep up the writing because I am still reading.
she had better take this chance
and tell him what he needs to hear--they can take it slow and get to know one another. If she pushes him away, Leif will start sleeping around and that will be THE END.
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