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by Anonymous

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by HarryHill08/10/13

he pet as he should at her firm fixed coiffure

What?

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by Angeline08/10/13

Gave it a five because you don't ever write a bad poem

but I agree with Harry that the one line is unclear. Seems like maybe some sort of typo...I am not getting it. Otherwise, love it. Hairspray is a very good metaphor for rigidity.

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by susansnow08/11/13

Prolly not the best most concise sentence

sorry 'bout that guys. I'll do better next time.

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by Trixareforkids05/29/14

Funny,

The line in question made perfect sense to me. It read as absent minded affection and a lack of passion. Which perfectly set up what was to follow.

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