Please continue. But do not make it too sweet, nor too short. You have hit an angle that is interesting. I am willing to wait.
It is hard to find a topic that has not been beaten into the ground. You have found it. Be gentle, be kind. Please remember that the type of person that likes this type of story, is not looking for sex. We are looking for good outcomes.
Thank you for the great feedback! This was my first attempt at something longer than a short story. Unfortunately I am a slow writer and an even slower editor, but I am almost finished with the next part. Any and all feedback is cherished!
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Good story, though I thought it was a bit rushed.
Please continue. But do not make it too sweet, nor too short. You have hit an angle that is interesting. I am willing to wait.
It is hard to find a topic that has not been beaten into the ground. You have found it. Be gentle, be kind. Please remember that the type of person that likes this type of story, is not looking for sex. We are looking for good outcomes.
Wonderful. Love and sex are not only for the perceived to be perfect.
Please do continue this.
Nice, but needs some
conflict, an antagonist, something to create tension, going to lose readers fast otherwise.
Thank you for the feedback!
Thank you for the great feedback! This was my first attempt at something longer than a short story. Unfortunately I am a slow writer and an even slower editor, but I am almost finished with the next part. Any and all feedback is cherished!
AT THE VERY LEAST
she is adventurous. TK U MLJ LV NV
Almost finished with the next part back in August? When is it coming?
Ever going to submit the next part that was almost finished back in August last year?
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