A Quiet Night In

Get an editor

The story is OK but needs serious editing. It is full of run-on sentences, unclear subjects and even one posessive "it's". Literotica provides editors; use one! You might also learn something about English grammar.

thanks for

the warning but you should try going back to school because as usual people like you are not very bright, as they say a little education never hurt anyone no matter how old you are and you never know you might even meet people there that can teach how to be a human being you fucking loser.

Dear Anonymous if there as anyone ho needed more education

it's you,. you dim witted ass wipe. You read every LW story and then bitch like a fag you are

To the Last Anonymous

Your the asswipe dickweed. No better than the previous anon. You read the COMMENTS flame at the poster and say nothing about the story. Whose the moron? Did you read the story? Or just the comments.BTW Pretty well written story for what it is. Not my cup of tea but whatever floats their boat.

I liked the story...

It played to one of my own fantasies, actually. The story moved along quickly - and had a good pace. I didn't NOTICE any egregious grammar errors - so, the story must have been too hot for me to notice. :)

Keep it up.

based solely on your "please don't bother reading any further" statement

I didn't, because anyone arrogant enough to try telling potential readers what to do is obviously a fucktard, and their work not worth the effort to read.

Never read a single word but I came here to tell you you're an asshole. Any author who would shit on readers before the first paragraph must be a total asshole! Just saying!

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Nothing more needs to be said.

Skiped this piece of shit.

Stories about guys pimping their wives out turn me off.

It seems as they have a good relationship with each other, and she isn't cheating on him.

A nicely done wife sharing story.

A well thought out storyline and a well written erotic story.

As long as they both are happy with their relationship then it works for them.

Thanks for the read.

Characters

If an author doesn't make the readers feel SOMETHING about the characters in the story (even to hating one or more of them), then the story will be forgotten within an hour! IMHO, that is the MAJOR problem with this tale!

Punctuation

The punctuation is poor - for info., full stops are used at the end of sentences, as well as at the end of paragraphs. Lost interest in 5th paragraph as a result, and didn't read the rest.

It speaks ...

for itself.

Fiv Stars.

I could NOT disagree more with the previous comments. The story was realistic and much like what my wife and I do. Give us more events such as this.