The story seems to be written with a lot of raw emotion
Well done !
A very sweet love affair, and in my mind I could only think of how sweet it was for them to find such beautiful love.
She seemed to be able to keep two men sexually pleased, and I was hoping that she was being fucked at least six times a week by having two men fucking her.
Thanks for the great read...
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Anonymous08/14/13
thanx
Been awhile...Missed your gift of story telling....
I hope she'll become pregnant of her brother's child ASAP! Can't wait for another chapter!
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Anonymous08/15/13
Been waiting
welcome back.
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Anonymous08/20/13
They found love
Love is all there is. Great story, I hope they can become a couple, and maybe have that baby together one of the readers requested.
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Anonymous08/31/13
aww u feel that? u dont feel that? it feels good ty
man, i guess im not the only 1 who wants to fuck his sister. we have when i was 18-19 but it was...um. lets just say i ruined the mood. i am older now. i know in my heart we wanna fuck again. how do u bring something like this up? sometimes i see her looking.. opportunities have come up. i didnt take them. scared she would freak. oh i dont drink any more. that makes it harder to ask. i thought the story was close to my own. im a divorced single dad (i have the kid) and she she married (w/ 2 kids).
ps: just cuz i wanna fuck my sis dont make me a prev.... i dont play that shit my son is healthy, happy, and, very smart --incest(bro/sis) is not molestation
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Anonymous09/02/13
THE MOMENTUM OF BEING
Your words bring lust and heartfelt sensation into the dialogue betwenn brother and sister creating worlds forested with fascinating sexual confusion and where life is really being lived and the unknown accomodated.. So good.
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Anonymous09/03/13
Need more from these 2!
Continue plz! 10 chap. at least, a novella maybe, potential.
What about her husband? She gives no thought to her betrayal although she mentions she keeps him happy. What is wrong in her marriage that she can do this with no thought of the consequences to her family? Even though there may be nothing wrong, she should still feel guilty and I believe those issues should be addressed. Gave it a four.
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Anonymous09/22/13
More!
Hope they can be a real couple, plz continue, need more from these 2!
A woman can love two men at once. This is a beautiful story. You should add to it.
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Anonymous10/17/13
Wher ch. 4?
When is ch.04? I'll be back in a month. Hot story
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Anonymous10/23/13
NO WAY
IT ALWAYS ENDS THE SAME WAY. YOU CAN'T LOVE TWO LOVERS. YOU WILL END UP HATING ONE AND THE NEED BECOMES TOO GREAT AND YOU GET CAUGHT. YOU BECOME TOO RECKLESS AND TAKE TOO MANY CHANCES. EVENTUALLY EVEN THE LOVE YOU HAVE BECOMES TAINTED, NO ONE WILL SURVIVE.
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Anonymous10/26/13
One of the commenters posted 'what about her husband, she should feel guilty'. If I was helping my sister I wouldnt feel guilty. Very careful so I would never hurt my wife by her finding out, but guilty for helping the sister I love? No. People can love more than one person. Is it easy? Is it wise? No. ...but... How the brother doesnt resent the wife enough to divorce her and file for full custody since she is obviously mentally unstable, now thats a good question. Id rather my kids found out that my wife cheated on me than they find out that she didnt love her husband enough (or at all really) to be intimate with him, destroying him from the inside out. Cheating is one thing, the other is hateful, spiteful and cruelty filled with planned malice.
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Anonymous12/13/13
I know that a man can have places in his heart for two women. Love them both. Nick seems to have a fairly complete life at home barring sex. As Sara does in her
home life. It sounds as if her home sex life is somewhat uninspired and her 'affair' with her brother completes hers. I don't know if this series should continue, it has been awesome to this point. I'm not sure that this writer should complicate their story too much since it has been simple and loving to this point. Any drama hereafter would be where people could get hurt and that wouldn't be good.
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Anonymous12/31/13
Continue
I'm waiting for the hunting trip. At least 1 more....2 more? Plz. This is just fiction, I believe in 1 on 1
If I could make a suggestion though, if you do continue this series, please handwave the kids away, and make their marriages crumble, anything excuse that can serve as a catalyst for the siblings to be together indefinitely.
I came across this story by pure accident, and although I had no intention of reading it at first, I got hooked pretty quickly. My initial impression was that it looked simple, but it turns out you write in a way that makes the emotions stand out strong, to a point where it actually hurts a bit. I suspect that is why I like it as much as I do.
I also have to compliment you for your bold use of short sections of texts. It could be disastrous, but the way you handle it works very well. Good job!
Another good story by you I kept thinking wife would find out and encourage relationship.Maybe that would be a god follow up thanks for the entertainment.
Your writing is fantastic. I waited to finish the story before commenting. Your command of the English-language is superb. I honestly think you could easily be a best selling romance author. Have you ever considered writing for money? You should. I find myself skipping over the sex scenes in many stories here, and books that I buy, but not yours, somehow you have managed to hit the perfect balance between graphic and romantic at the same time. It's a complete shame that a full length novel version of this story cannot be picked up by one of the regular publishers, but incest is still not a socially acceptable topic for mainstream consumption. Still, you could self publish under a pen name. I recently read a two book series dealing with older woman MUCH younger man that was one of the best things I've ever read. It has found it's own fan following and is a best seller on Amazon. Perhaps a full length novel version of this story could be a breakthrough of incest as topic into mainstream publishing, who knows? It would be nice to find out though. Anyway, keep up the fantastic writing, you have certainly found a fan in me, ans I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a wonderful day!
If this series is finished, then ignore this comment. Otherwise, may I suggest that you make the siblings discover that their respective spouses are also having affairs (with each other or other people, it doesn't matter) in order to have an excuse for them to move away and live together? Yes, yes, I know I'm being hypocritical by condoning only the siblings' mutual affair, but you know where the readers' allegiance lie, so I will do what I can to nudge you along that path! ;)
Question is why did Suzanne totally shut down sex life? It would matter going forward. I mean, sometimes sex does sometimes go lacking for long periods of time. It's happened to me, but to announce that "I just don't want to have sex anymore, even though I still love you," is something quite different. No explanation. There must be some reason -- so anyway that's an undefined element.
Will the other two spouses find out? They're bound to eventually. The result could be anything from all four breaking up and going their separate ways to all living in one big happy family.
A very good story with lots of open issues. The writer is clearly a woman; that's good.
you can love two people. You can't love them in exactly the same way, whether their in parallel or in series. You don't even love your children in exactly the same way!
although the sex was super hot, i think the turmoil that she is having with the affair, is what makes this little series so wonderful. i think this story could stand as it is or if the author were so inclined, be continued with as many chapters as needed to complete what the author wants to say. ...btw, to the commenters that dont see how a wife can just stop having sex, trust me it happens. i know from personal experience of this...lol...in my case i have my two girlfriends, lucy left and rachael right to see to my needs. they never say no. again GOOD JOB YOU BAD BOY!!!
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Anonymous05/17/15
Is Suzanne having an affair of her own?
Usually, women who deny their husbands sex, but act all lovey-dovey, do so for a reason. Either she's mentally unstable, or she's having sex with someone else, someone she's deeply committed to, and all the 'I love you' she's giving Nick is her smoke-screen; I think it might have been Baudelaire who wrote to the effect that women write their most heartfelt love-letters to the man they are busily betraying.
An interesting story. Like others I wondered what is really going on with Suzanne. I also feel this is an incomplete story. The author has left the readers hanging wondering what finally happened.
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Anonymous05/09/16
Sara
Your Sara is a wonderful girl and a romantic soul. I hope if this story ever progresses she doesn't get her heart broken.
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Anonymous07/18/16
Fantastic as always
I love all your stories. You have a great way with words: the way you clip sentences and use one word sentences brings so much more to the telling of the emotional state of your characters than other authors. You ply your craft extremely well.
Having said that, you do still have some work to do with editing. Sometimes the grammar and punctuation get screwed up in the midst of your unorthodox passages and sentences. And, in this particular story, Sara's hair color changes from chocolate brown on the boat (Part 2) to blond at the house (Part 3).
I also rather like that you use Sara's name again - I feel I know her from "The Car Trip" series.
English
The story seems to be written with a lot of raw emotion
Well done !
A very sweet love affair, and in my mind I could only think of how sweet it was for them to find such beautiful love.
She seemed to be able to keep two men sexually pleased, and I was hoping that she was being fucked at least six times a week by having two men fucking her.
Thanks for the great read...
thanx
Been awhile...Missed your gift of story telling....
Good.
The year and a half hiatus wasn't cool. But this story is hot. Love your writing style. Thank you.
Another great installment
I hope she'll become pregnant of her brother's child ASAP! Can't wait for another chapter!
Been waiting
welcome back.
They found love
Love is all there is. Great story, I hope they can become a couple, and maybe have that baby together one of the readers requested.
aww u feel that? u dont feel that? it feels good ty
man, i guess im not the only 1 who wants to fuck his sister. we have when i was 18-19 but it was...um. lets just say i ruined the mood. i am older now. i know in my heart we wanna fuck again. how do u bring something like this up? sometimes i see her looking.. opportunities have come up. i didnt take them. scared she would freak. oh i dont drink any more. that makes it harder to ask. i thought the story was close to my own. im a divorced single dad (i have the kid) and she she married (w/ 2 kids).
um...
-------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------------- -----dude
ps: just cuz i wanna fuck my sis dont make me a prev.... i dont play that shit my son is healthy, happy, and, very smart --incest(bro/sis) is not molestation
THE MOMENTUM OF BEING
Your words bring lust and heartfelt sensation into the dialogue betwenn brother and sister creating worlds forested with fascinating sexual confusion and where life is really being lived and the unknown accomodated.. So good.
Need more from these 2!
Continue plz! 10 chap. at least, a novella maybe, potential.
I really like the story, but...
What about her husband? She gives no thought to her betrayal although she mentions she keeps him happy. What is wrong in her marriage that she can do this with no thought of the consequences to her family? Even though there may be nothing wrong, she should still feel guilty and I believe those issues should be addressed. Gave it a four.
More!
Hope they can be a real couple, plz continue, need more from these 2!
A woman can love two men at once. This is a beautiful story. You should add to it.
Wher ch. 4?
When is ch.04? I'll be back in a month. Hot story
NO WAY
IT ALWAYS ENDS THE SAME WAY. YOU CAN'T LOVE TWO LOVERS. YOU WILL END UP HATING ONE AND THE NEED BECOMES TOO GREAT AND YOU GET CAUGHT. YOU BECOME TOO RECKLESS AND TAKE TOO MANY CHANCES. EVENTUALLY EVEN THE LOVE YOU HAVE BECOMES TAINTED, NO ONE WILL SURVIVE.
One of the commenters posted 'what about her husband, she should feel guilty'. If I was helping my sister I wouldnt feel guilty. Very careful so I would never hurt my wife by her finding out, but guilty for helping the sister I love? No. People can love more than one person. Is it easy? Is it wise? No. ...but... How the brother doesnt resent the wife enough to divorce her and file for full custody since she is obviously mentally unstable, now thats a good question. Id rather my kids found out that my wife cheated on me than they find out that she didnt love her husband enough (or at all really) to be intimate with him, destroying him from the inside out. Cheating is one thing, the other is hateful, spiteful and cruelty filled with planned malice.
I know that a man can have places in his heart for two women. Love them both. Nick seems to have a fairly complete life at home barring sex. As Sara does in her
home life. It sounds as if her home sex life is somewhat uninspired and her 'affair' with her brother completes hers. I don't know if this series should continue, it has been awesome to this point. I'm not sure that this writer should complicate their story too much since it has been simple and loving to this point. Any drama hereafter would be where people could get hurt and that wouldn't be good.
Continue
I'm waiting for the hunting trip. At least 1 more....2 more? Plz. This is just fiction, I believe in 1 on 1
Highly Erotic!
If I could make a suggestion though, if you do continue this series, please handwave the kids away, and make their marriages crumble, anything excuse that can serve as a catalyst for the siblings to be together indefinitely.
Talk about a tightrope.
I am almost reluctant to read any more of these lovers as I fear it will all collapse.
You do wrote a story which gets me right in.
Very nice!
I came across this story by pure accident, and although I had no intention of reading it at first, I got hooked pretty quickly. My initial impression was that it looked simple, but it turns out you write in a way that makes the emotions stand out strong, to a point where it actually hurts a bit. I suspect that is why I like it as much as I do.
I also have to compliment you for your bold use of short sections of texts. It could be disastrous, but the way you handle it works very well. Good job!
It's good
Another good story by you I kept thinking wife would find out and encourage relationship.Maybe that would be a god follow up thanks for the entertainment.
Fantastic
Your writing is fantastic. I waited to finish the story before commenting. Your command of the English-language is superb. I honestly think you could easily be a best selling romance author. Have you ever considered writing for money? You should. I find myself skipping over the sex scenes in many stories here, and books that I buy, but not yours, somehow you have managed to hit the perfect balance between graphic and romantic at the same time. It's a complete shame that a full length novel version of this story cannot be picked up by one of the regular publishers, but incest is still not a socially acceptable topic for mainstream consumption. Still, you could self publish under a pen name. I recently read a two book series dealing with older woman MUCH younger man that was one of the best things I've ever read. It has found it's own fan following and is a best seller on Amazon. Perhaps a full length novel version of this story could be a breakthrough of incest as topic into mainstream publishing, who knows? It would be nice to find out though. Anyway, keep up the fantastic writing, you have certainly found a fan in me, ans I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a wonderful day!
Come on part4
So hot!
Fantastic as Usual!
If this series is finished, then ignore this comment. Otherwise, may I suggest that you make the siblings discover that their respective spouses are also having affairs (with each other or other people, it doesn't matter) in order to have an excuse for them to move away and live together? Yes, yes, I know I'm being hypocritical by condoning only the siblings' mutual affair, but you know where the readers' allegiance lie, so I will do what I can to nudge you along that path! ;)
One of the best I have ever read in Literotica
A great story with lots of unresolved issues --
Question is why did Suzanne totally shut down sex life? It would matter going forward. I mean, sometimes sex does sometimes go lacking for long periods of time. It's happened to me, but to announce that "I just don't want to have sex anymore, even though I still love you," is something quite different. No explanation. There must be some reason -- so anyway that's an undefined element.
Will the other two spouses find out? They're bound to eventually. The result could be anything from all four breaking up and going their separate ways to all living in one big happy family.
A very good story with lots of open issues. The writer is clearly a woman; that's good.
Of course --
you can love two people. You can't love them in exactly the same way, whether their in parallel or in series. You don't even love your children in exactly the same way!
GOOD JOB!!!
although the sex was super hot, i think the turmoil that she is having with the affair, is what makes this little series so wonderful. i think this story could stand as it is or if the author were so inclined, be continued with as many chapters as needed to complete what the author wants to say. ...btw, to the commenters that dont see how a wife can just stop having sex, trust me it happens. i know from personal experience of this...lol...in my case i have my two girlfriends, lucy left and rachael right to see to my needs. they never say no. again GOOD JOB YOU BAD BOY!!!
Is Suzanne having an affair of her own?
Usually, women who deny their husbands sex, but act all lovey-dovey, do so for a reason. Either she's mentally unstable, or she's having sex with someone else, someone she's deeply committed to, and all the 'I love you' she's giving Nick is her smoke-screen; I think it might have been Baudelaire who wrote to the effect that women write their most heartfelt love-letters to the man they are busily betraying.
???
An interesting story. Like others I wondered what is really going on with Suzanne. I also feel this is an incomplete story. The author has left the readers hanging wondering what finally happened.
Sara
Your Sara is a wonderful girl and a romantic soul. I hope if this story ever progresses she doesn't get her heart broken.
Fantastic as always
I love all your stories. You have a great way with words: the way you clip sentences and use one word sentences brings so much more to the telling of the emotional state of your characters than other authors. You ply your craft extremely well.
Having said that, you do still have some work to do with editing. Sometimes the grammar and punctuation get screwed up in the midst of your unorthodox passages and sentences. And, in this particular story, Sara's hair color changes from chocolate brown on the boat (Part 2) to blond at the house (Part 3).
I also rather like that you use Sara's name again - I feel I know her from "The Car Trip" series.
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This is one of the best series I have read . Thank you
fantastic
just loved this thank you
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