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Let's Start from the Beginning Ch. 01

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by Anonymous09/15/13

Very nice!

I love the descriptions of the less than perfect body!

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by ReefBeach09/20/13

good story

I agree, the realistic body shapes add to the story. Great sense of fun and pleasure, love the twist at the end.
Check your tenses at the end; I got a bit confused. If you slip into present to make it more immediate, best to stay there, not go back to past.

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by Anonymous11/02/14

more please!

Luv this! Is there a chapter 2???

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by Anonymous02/08/15

Are we going to get an update soon? Pretty pretty please!!???

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