i want that few minutes of my life back, that it took to read this crap
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Anonymous08/27/13
???
was good til you got to the piss part
by
Anonymous08/27/13
Potential...
Agree with "???" Anonymous in that it was good until the piss, but I like the thought that she's gotten herself in deeper than she expected...
I'll judge this series by the second chapter
Down Under Dude
by
Anonymous08/28/13
Peeing?
Seriously? The pee part ruined an otherwise great read.
by
Anonymous08/29/13
Feels like a check list
I liked the story line but it went too fast. It was like a check list, just wanting to get to the next thing in the list. I would of like more description on how it feels and some four play. Could do with them not came as fast as they did. I am more of a fan of slow build up.
Also, you should put a warning at the start about there being pee play in this story. (I had no issue with that, unlike others I'm into that).
English
rubbish
so improbable
i want that few minutes of my life back, that it took to read this crap
???
was good til you got to the piss part
Potential...
Agree with "???" Anonymous in that it was good until the piss, but I like the thought that she's gotten herself in deeper than she expected...
I'll judge this series by the second chapter
Down Under Dude
Peeing?
Seriously? The pee part ruined an otherwise great read.
Feels like a check list
I liked the story line but it went too fast. It was like a check list, just wanting to get to the next thing in the list. I would of like more description on how it feels and some four play. Could do with them not came as fast as they did. I am more of a fan of slow build up.
Also, you should put a warning at the start about there being pee play in this story. (I had no issue with that, unlike others I'm into that).
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It was exciting, i would like to see more !!!!
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