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by Angeline08/15/13

Another 5

Great title and your poems never disappoint.

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by HarryHill08/15/13

very nice Susan

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by GuiltyPleasure08/15/13

It's taken me.....

.....a few readings of your poetry to warm to it. It is unconventional (by Lit's standards) but original and absorbing. In the 7th sentence there seems to be a missing "to" after "ancestors" but that's small taters. Five.

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by susansnow08/15/13

Thanks Guys!

Thank you for your kind comments.

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by normal jean08/16/13

nice :)

In line 5 I think "complements" would be a better choice than "compliments". I like the poem, I love poems about frogs and swamps, but I think you could tighten this one up into stanzas and some strategic positioning could incur some great internal rhyme and a smoother meter. Overall, I enjoyed the poem. I see a talent developing her skills. Best of luck to you and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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