A Demon...Or Two Just For Me Ch. 03

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Loving it so far

amazing

Amazing story... 'm jst eagerly waiting fr the nxt chapter

Stuff getting an editor

Forget the editor just post the next chapter. ASAP!

Information Dump

A little overwhelming. All of a sudden we have like 10 new characters we apparently have to know everything about? It took two chapters to introduce her to her second mate, but one to reintroduce her entire family, and their families?

keep going, waiting to see what happens next. great story

Disappointing

This chapter was a bit of a let down from the first two.

First of all, AJ/Stephanos are starting to act uncomfortably possessive. The thing with the truck? That's not caring and romantic, that's scary and controlling.
Then, the stuff with University just doesn't make sense.

First, why is she staying in the dorm instead of moving in with AJ? It seems far more simple and satisfactory a solution to the issue of keeping her company. Then, her professors all agreeing to give her extra time without any specifics.... As if! You have been to school of some kind, right?

Finally, the most disappointing thing is the downward turn the style of your narrative has taken. No more views into how Vi is feeling and what she is thinking, no natural responses to overwhelming new information, no careful pacing to reveal new characters . . . I had a hard time finishing this chapter.

I'm still looking forward to chapter 4, I hope you are able to get back to better writing.

Not surprised at all that Vi wasn't related to that hateful she thought was hers. Now I wonder how she is going to work out being with her family and A.J./Stefanos.

agree with willieone

I love this story and your other story i always am looking for a update from u.please continue

Interesting premise

I'm interested in what this means for their relationship (presumably she can gender shift as well). I do like the direction, but the execution was a bit odd. If her family had been keeping such a close watch on her, wouldn't they know about AJ and stefanos? Besides that, if they couldn't get close to her due to the talismans and such, how would that allow them to heal her when she was a child? The idea of her being half demon/ half fallen angel makes sense, but it could have been handled a bit better. Other than that, good work. Keep it up.

Very clever plot of why her real parents could not get her back.

I'll be happy...

to edit for you. If you're interested then let me know and I'll give you my email addy :)

Please continue!!!

I really appreciate this chapter. It did in a few plot holes...but I did the lack of sex, haha. But please, more chapters. I am getting sucked into this story! Thanks.

eh

Starting to get boring...

Keep going hun!

Don't mind the ney sayer they are out numbered by those of us who love your work so post more asap!

Freaking A!!!!

Damn I absolutely love this story!!!! Please continue!!!!!

In Love!

I am in LOVE with this story! I can't wait for the next chapter!

More more more more ...MORE

You can do as many as you like the more the merrier. Loving this story to bits... You are amazing... MORE please :) xx

I love this story..cant wait to read more :-)

Dont Stop!!

I love this story so much. I love the characters. Please continue to write!! You could definitely make a series and I would buy every single one!!

Whoa

That was quite a twist! She needs her men back. Yes, you need an editor, but keep writing! This is a great story with interesting potential!

I'm hooked!

I sat in front of this computer gobbling up all three installments. Despite a few head scratching moments I'm glad you answered some of the questions I had. Your other stories are just as engrossing and can't wait to see what you come up with next. I still feel bit uneasy about how Violet's parents offered her up the way they did regardless of their good intentions.

More chapters!!!!

At least 10 to 15 chapters.

LOVE IT!!!

This a really good story that's goin on but really she needs her men back and you should have it so A.j an stefanos can meet her parents. Also how was that her parents were able to heal her and wasn't able to take her? Also why was her adopted parents were so mean to her when A: she kept their bitchy daughter alive
B: she remained loyal to them and C: she never turned on them ?

Editor

I would be happy to edit your work for you! I am in Uni and I love grammar and punctuation.