by VaRiverWriter
Please continue. At least Bobby will be hours closer to the beach.
I love the start to this story. Can't wait to read more!!!
I have to agree I am enjoying this so far so am to the next to play catch up
Time line? how is it they're just telling him about moving, he goes for a swim comes home to a sister that's already packed to move in 2 days, yet he knew nothing about it til he was told before storming out of the house?
True there is no stated time line in the beginning of the story but, for all we know this could have been one of many arguments over the coures of a couple of days. He could have brought back up the topic of the move and got upset again when he saw that they weren't going to change there minds.
And now for the author I like the start of this story so far and I hope I like it even more as I go to read the next chapter.
". . . eased my 5'10" frame" - Don't do this - tabloid newspapers write like this, real people don't refer to their own body as a "frame".
I didn't rate this 5 star story after my initial reading. I honestly wasn't sure id read on in the series.
I've come back here to say that today I finished "Plotting a Course", the sequel to "Bait a Hook". Both books are a delightful and sexy read. Read on, folks, read on. The story gets better and better.
Kudos VaRiverWriter!
The emotional side, his thoughts - that's well written. Enjoyed reading.
But the timeline for moving seems extremely rushed. Even a week would be short notice. Or did their parents keep it a secret until they had everything arranged? Instead of being sensible and telling when the decision is made, which is necessarily considerably earlier, having to find a new house after securing a job, etc.