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The Awekening Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/29/13

The title isnt spelled right and a lot of the story switched between tenses (past and present). My advice is to get an editor or proofread it more than you have.

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by Anonymous08/29/13

Such a good girl

Now give us more, neha ... please continue and tell us how your powers developed!

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by Anonymous08/29/13

superb pls continue

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by wrighter09/29/13

awesum cumsum

the title wasnt that great, but dear u as usual are awesome. i liked this built up. great going dear. looking out for more

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by fraankhardy12/17/13

awesome ...

read all ur submissions ... gud work ... continue ...

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