Actually very original. Your language is so unique, and this makes me read it like sex is something new. You have to be honest to write that way and not just copy the typical word use of other writers. Even if it's due to English not being your first language, still it is great writing. I hope you continue to write a lot more.
English
Rubbish
Never read anything so bad
T E R R I B L E
terrible
unusual word use
Actually very original. Your language is so unique, and this makes me read it like sex is something new. You have to be honest to write that way and not just copy the typical word use of other writers. Even if it's due to English not being your first language, still it is great writing. I hope you continue to write a lot more.
not a bad beginning
Waiting for the next part.... and please write longer chapters
It's good
I got off this one 3 times
Purpose served
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