Good topic, good start, a little more smoldering sex stuff, and you'll be in.
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Anonymous06/01/07
fuck
this was a good story but like the asshole you are you never finished the dam story if you aren't going to finish then please don't start show some respect for the readers we don't like being left hanging
I agree keep these comeing they are also getting better I don't see the errors anyway I just read lol I am insane when it come to reviewing that is lol anyway keepum cumin
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Anonymous04/19/11
Good
if not being a native speaker has done anything to your writing, it is to make it more descriptive. Then a regular English speaker, you use your whole knowledge of the language while some people use almost none.
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Anonymous02/17/12
Your English seemed fine and your plot was good.
Keep up the good work.
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Anonymous06/07/13
Continue story
I think you should continue the story. Tell where it goes from there
English
Good stuff
Good topic, good start, a little more smoldering sex stuff, and you'll be in.
fuck
this was a good story but like the asshole you are you never finished the dam story if you aren't going to finish then please don't start show some respect for the readers we don't like being left hanging
no problems
I had no problems reading your stories, i don't think anyone would be able to tell English isn't your native tongue. Keep up the good work.
Yea
It was awesome. Made me think!
fuckin hot
this is fuckin hot story i would love to hear wat happened in shower
Woohoo
I agree keep these comeing they are also getting better I don't see the errors anyway I just read lol I am insane when it come to reviewing that is lol anyway keepum cumin
Good
if not being a native speaker has done anything to your writing, it is to make it more descriptive. Then a regular English speaker, you use your whole knowledge of the language while some people use almost none.
Your English seemed fine and your plot was good.
Keep up the good work.
Continue story
I think you should continue the story. Tell where it goes from there
Pretty darned good for a second language!!
You did very well with your English. And what a story!!! GREAT!!! Keep them coming.
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