Loss

I thought this was very good. Loved the line breaks on crickets. I'd change the comma after 'mouth' to a period.

I liked this in the 5 senses

especially pleased it was written with my word challenges :)

Enjambment is

Terrific , Remec ---5-ed .

It's the repetition of "crickets" and the sound of it that made this short poem remarkable as well as the mourning for me. It says so much with the few words, all of which seems to fit so well.

greenmountaineer (Lit's not accepting my log-in for comments on poems for some reason.)

Congrats

on getting a comment with substance
congrats to the person leaving it
5ed
but with reservations:
still tastes sweet in my mouth,
good
even touching your hair felt wrong.
even better
but
lonely, mournful song
puts this in song territory i.e. hook is a cliche
also be nice to see a little more comments from you, good practice

A really good piece! I liked it. Thanks for posting it.