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by todski2808/28/13

Nice

Handling of a taboo topic.

I am no technical poetry guy, but I enjoyed the smiths flow of

The sheets,
her rouging cheeks

Also the w's in the final three lines work wonders

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by twelveoone08/28/13

darker, hotter

really don't think anybody else could have gotten away with those two words. the rest you are wicked with your words, in ways never quite expected, a shame, it is one the defining arts of poetry. sometimes i wonder what everybody else is looking at.

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