Owning Bella Ch. 10

Loved the whole story

Thanks for this. It is a truely wonderful story. But I had to laugh really hard as you wrote about cars in Venice. There are no cars in Venice because it is a city in the water. There is the industrial part on the mainland but the good hotels can only reached by ship. But this is a minor thing and something a lot of people do not belive till they saw it themselves.
I loved the story and I do not like that Mel is dead. I want Mel and Bella to live their life together. But perhaps she can find a new love... on to the next story!

*teary eyed*
i began reading your series "Mastering Bella". You are an amazing writer... the way you took us through the blossoming of a new slave.... And then to continue with the growth of her love and trust in her Master with "Owning Bella". i'll admit that i was a bit shocked to find out Vince was Mel's son, but i knew he had to be behind at least part of what was going on. Thank you so very much for sharing the good and the bad of Mel & His Ellie's time together. i look forward to reading "Possessing Bella". In fact, i plan on starting to read it in just a few minutes. *grins*

journal style, and many more

First of all, thank you for a highly enjoyable read. You have quite a talent to put live in your characters, and the reader can't help but build up a sort of relation to them. That's why at times there's so much highly emotional reaction on some of your story twists.

There's been some criticism on the journal style in the last chapter, but I think it's perfectly right. Yes, all the characters we got to know so well seem to be missing, but that's the way she must feel. People around her fade to the background, her focus completely on the one she can't be with, those letters probably the only thing she finds energy for. When she looks back some day she herself will not remember much more of this time.

Mel's death indeed came surprisingly, but in a way it's conclusive. He always thought to be in control, but he never really was. He was wrong in so many ways. I lost my hope that he'll ever be a good master after she ran off to her parents. They got an overdue talk where he seemed to have understood that their main problem is her lack of trust and that this was mainly *his* fault, not having earned and established this trust yet. And shortly afterwards he still seems to think that trust is not only to be established by order, no, in his mind it obviously can be tattooed … in that phase you almost lost me, as not only I didn't understand Mel, but I had no idea why Bella didn't freak out then. She was so off balance that she ran away from him, than one little talk calming the waves, and minutes later he kicks her off balance even more?

The plane episode I didn't understand either. Again I thought it would put her off balance even more in a moment when she would have needed exactly the opposite. But maybe I was still too angry to recognize what was really going on.

So I think, though he definitely had his moments, after all Mel was a possessive asshole. Whenever he said things like "mine" or "my Ellie" - and he did so quite a lot -, I shivered and couldn't help but visualize Gollum - sorry, but at times I would have advised a psychologist. I'm not sure he ever really loved Bella, but he surely loved to possess her. And young and inexperienced as she was, I'm not even sure that Bella loved really him or just how he reacted to her, how he thought of her as something so special, and how he made her feel things she never knew were inside her. And I'm absolutely sure he would have hurt her soul a lot over the time. I couldn't see a happy ending and I wished for him to lose her - but I certainly wouldn't have claimed his head … drastic choice of yours, but understandable for me.

Somewhere in the second half the events turned more and more towards a criminal story and for me the erotic touch almost vanished - but although being on an erotic story site, you obviously kept me (and many other readers), which says a lot about your writing skills!

So I need a little recovery break before going to the next part of Bella's life as this ending was emotionally exhausting, but I definitely will read it. I just signed in on literotica to give this first ever comment by me on a story here a name.

Thanks again for a fabulous story, and sorry for any odd use of words as English is not my mother tongue. I tried my best, as you did! But I didn't have an editor. ;-)

zwyrbl

Mixed emotions....

This was such a great story, I read mastering Bella and this completely. I loved everything about it except when Mel died. I've been reading the next part of this and it's just not that good. You shouldn't have killed off Mel, Bella was better with him. I think you should've killed off some other important person to Bella, like one of her parents or someone like Kurt or Diane. Aside from that, the story was great. You're a fantastic writer.

The tears are flowing

I can't believe how much this story effected me, you are the most amazing writer!!!!

why??

Its 7:42 it feels like 11:52 pm and I just read this, I am seriously crying why did hedie!? Omg u are an amazing writer I enjoyed ever moment of these stories
Thanks for everything

depressed now !

thanks for the story but now iam fucking depressed
all in all well done !

In Tears

I seriously cried thru this whole chapter. I fell in love with all your characters. I loved it all...thru the tears, the many outbursts of laughter, the hot & descriptive love scenes...fabulous work!

I'm crying so hard... but so beautiful!

Wow just wow, you made me cry so much in this series, beautiful relationship... I only hope to be as good of as sub as this sweet girl. I'll find my beautiful Mel one day

Woww

Great work! I love the entire series and can't stop reading! Great work!!! Can't wait to read more

dried my eyes out

Why did Mel die? I decided to read erotic stories to divert from my depression in a non-erotic novel... But now here I am depressed again. Don't get me wrong, your novel was superb, maybe deep inside I just wish he didn't die. I love your story so much that I fell in love with Mel as well. I don't know if I'm ready to read your next series, I know it'll be a great one but owning bella is so intense, that I want to cry all day...

I didn't want to cry this much... But your story makes me...
Although it's not my intention to be this depressed...
I still love the story... Buon lavoro Ellie :) Grazie!

Noooooo!

Mel's death was too abrupt. He was too important to the series. A very unsatisfing tragedy.

Strange story.

I liked this one more than the first one. I still think Mel was too sadistic. Even though Bella accepted his cruelty and even convinced herself that she craved it, I think she would have been happier with a little less torture. I believe in his own way he really did love Bella and she loved him. His death increased her lack of self worth, believing it was her fault. She is a very twisted and mixed up girl.