This was a really good story and I enjoyed it a lot. Only issue is I would have loved it if it was longer. Perhaps nothing sexual happens with the brother and sister at the nudist resort but in the weeks after that they become closer and more open to being naked around each other. Other than that I really liked the story.
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Anonymous09/06/13
Great story
Awesome story... hot and fun.
I hope you continue it
Good story line and decent pace. Watch content... "she unzipped her skirt" early in the story and toward the end, "she dropped her pants to the floor. Her panties soon followed and she was naked from the waist down".
I agree with vsarmp's comment. Good story concept, and for the most part well done. There were a couple of grammar issues, and spelling errors that detracted from the enjoyment. Clean those up and you have a good tale.
One other style issue I would mention. It is one I deal with myself, and I see it frequently in other's stories. Sometimes you told us about the story rather than just telling the story. It may sound like semantics, but as you read over it carefully I think you will see what I mean. It disrupts the flow, and gives it an almost stilted sound.
great story. please have this love story continue.
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Anonymous09/08/13
Has a lot of Potential
It really starts out well but then loses steam. The beginning is very good and reasonably realistic, but then it gets too silly. It also has so little description of the characters that it is difficult to visualize them. With some work this could be a great story.
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Anonymous09/08/13
Left me wanting more!
It was fantastic story and I would love to read more about your summer with your sister.
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Anonymous09/10/13
Great story!
Definitely should be a series! Keep up the good work!
Inquiring minds want to know. If she didn't, she lost $100 and was fucked besides.
We definitely need another chapter.
Great story. Good luck in the Summer Lovin' contest.
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Anonymous12/11/13
Great story but...
I have one minor issue with it. It's really not something I expect anyone not familiar with the nudist scene to know, but getting an erection is generally not an issue, at least not in any of the nudist resorts I'm familiar with.
Of course sex is completely off limits outside private quarters, but the nudist people are aware that erections can't always be controlled, especially by young-ish first timers, and when it happens you really just walk it off and others ignore or at least pretend to ignore it, and in time when you get used to the whole thing, it stops happening. (It also helps that there's generally plenty of elderly, no longer sexy people of both sexes)
Other than that, it was a great story and I enjoyed it.
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Anonymous03/01/14
True, real nudist accept the occasional erection, some women would be pretty pissed off if a guy wouldn't get a woodie, it's a guy that acts like a horse's ass that is a no-no. Who kidding who, it was seeing his sister nude that had him rise to the occasion and give a two gun salute to her.
Liked the story and the interplay between the two. Good job.
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Anonymous04/10/14
fantastic story
I'm brazilian, so excuse my english.
I want to tell you my favorite author. Their stories are fantastic and full of horny. Love very incestuous involvements tells you. Never stop writing. Write always, the world of erotic stories needs you
Worked for me well crafted none of the crude talk and oversized breasts .You didn't feel the need to give an actual penis size just implied a robust endowment.No cheap tricks which never work for most people anyway.Would be nice to see a few more chapters.You have skills keep up the good work congratulations.
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Anonymous10/09/14
Great Story
Loved the story even to the point that with how quickly the sister was to 'help' implied that she was already thinking about taking him to a private room.
Nice pace, nice build up, nice ending. Perhaps you could send the two of them to cover a nude beauty pageant or an Adult Movie Exhibition next? Just please don't leave this theme with the one story.
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Anonymous06/23/15
Just help me once
This story was great , but you can't stop it here . There is so much more for these young adults to enjoy together, and a life time to enjoy it in.
A deliscously well crafted storyline that has a perfect buildup of intrigue with the two engaging characters. Totaly believable storyline, with subtle hook to open the innocent scene to blend into taboo sex.
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Anonymous09/02/15
My Kind of Brother-Sister Erotic Story
I love reading brother-sister (or mother-son, aunt-nephew, teacher-student, cousins, neighbors, etc) erotic fiction that is believable as nonfiction, as well. Having worked in radio and television, I have known several people like Brooke. I can also see me as Brooke. When I can put myself in a story, you have won me over.
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Anonymous02/03/16
Great
Very hot brother and sister sex.It needs to be continued with them moving in together & getting it on. Maybe even her getting knocked up would fit in the story-line.
English
I really liked this story
This was a really good story and I enjoyed it a lot. Only issue is I would have loved it if it was longer. Perhaps nothing sexual happens with the brother and sister at the nudist resort but in the weeks after that they become closer and more open to being naked around each other. Other than that I really liked the story.
Great story
Awesome story... hot and fun.
I hope you continue it
Great Story
Good story line and decent pace. Watch content... "she unzipped her skirt" early in the story and toward the end, "she dropped her pants to the floor. Her panties soon followed and she was naked from the waist down".
Spellings
A great story. Well written. A few spelling errors detracted from 5-star rating. Keep up the great work.
Enjoyable
I agree with vsarmp's comment. Good story concept, and for the most part well done. There were a couple of grammar issues, and spelling errors that detracted from the enjoyment. Clean those up and you have a good tale.
One other style issue I would mention. It is one I deal with myself, and I see it frequently in other's stories. Sometimes you told us about the story rather than just telling the story. It may sound like semantics, but as you read over it carefully I think you will see what I mean. It disrupts the flow, and gives it an almost stilted sound.
Keep writing! I look forward to more from you.
JC
Interesting and with the "fullness of sexuality"
So what??? - It is possible to write the stories normally and exciting???
- Of course, it's possible!!
- Can write without a "bald" pussies, drunkenness and salivation at the very thought of pushing the "prick into rectum", instead "in cunt"..
10 points for "loadedgun" - "for inspiration and idea"..
- A good, educational text. So keep!!
Worth more than 5 stars!
Excellent story! I'm going to send the link to your story to a few friends who are nudists. I'm sure they will enjoy your story also.
RecHiker
More parts in the offing ? This was an exciting story, though the sex act was short.
OK
Remonfs me of my first visit back inthe 60's. And yes, it's polite to take care of problems. But pretty soon you don't have them.....Love it
Part 2?
Please let there be a part 2!
Continue please
Would love to see more of this story. Why does it have to stop at the end of summer?
Another chapter please
Keep this story going
That was
Pretty friggin hot. Keep it up. I loved it.
which one?
Which person knew that they were siblings that had just fucked?
Needs continuation
This story was great, but it really needs to be continued. Need to see the two of them continuing their incestuous affair.
great
please continue and ASAP
wow
great story. please have this love story continue.
Has a lot of Potential
It really starts out well but then loses steam. The beginning is very good and reasonably realistic, but then it gets too silly. It also has so little description of the characters that it is difficult to visualize them. With some work this could be a great story.
Left me wanting more!
It was fantastic story and I would love to read more about your summer with your sister.
Great story!
Definitely should be a series! Keep up the good work!
But did Brooke get the job?
Inquiring minds want to know. If she didn't, she lost $100 and was fucked besides.
We definitely need another chapter.
Great story. Good luck in the Summer Lovin' contest.
Great story but...
I have one minor issue with it. It's really not something I expect anyone not familiar with the nudist scene to know, but getting an erection is generally not an issue, at least not in any of the nudist resorts I'm familiar with.
Of course sex is completely off limits outside private quarters, but the nudist people are aware that erections can't always be controlled, especially by young-ish first timers, and when it happens you really just walk it off and others ignore or at least pretend to ignore it, and in time when you get used to the whole thing, it stops happening. (It also helps that there's generally plenty of elderly, no longer sexy people of both sexes)
Other than that, it was a great story and I enjoyed it.
True, real nudist accept the occasional erection, some women would be pretty pissed off if a guy wouldn't get a woodie, it's a guy that acts like a horse's ass that is a no-no. Who kidding who, it was seeing his sister nude that had him rise to the occasion and give a two gun salute to her.
Well Done
Liked the story and the interplay between the two. Good job.
fantastic story
I'm brazilian, so excuse my english.
I want to tell you my favorite author. Their stories are fantastic and full of horny. Love very incestuous involvements tells you. Never stop writing. Write always, the world of erotic stories needs you
FANTASTIC!!!
This was a fucking fantastic story...wow man,
Can you add something more???
This is bloody hot and so perfect
Good Job
Worked for me well crafted none of the crude talk and oversized breasts .You didn't feel the need to give an actual penis size just implied a robust endowment.No cheap tricks which never work for most people anyway.Would be nice to see a few more chapters.You have skills keep up the good work congratulations.
Great Story
Loved the story even to the point that with how quickly the sister was to 'help' implied that she was already thinking about taking him to a private room.
Lovely Story
Nice pace, nice build up, nice ending. Perhaps you could send the two of them to cover a nude beauty pageant or an Adult Movie Exhibition next? Just please don't leave this theme with the one story.
Just help me once
This story was great , but you can't stop it here . There is so much more for these young adults to enjoy together, and a life time to enjoy it in.
Outstanding!
A deliscously well crafted storyline that has a perfect buildup of intrigue with the two engaging characters. Totaly believable storyline, with subtle hook to open the innocent scene to blend into taboo sex.
My Kind of Brother-Sister Erotic Story
I love reading brother-sister (or mother-son, aunt-nephew, teacher-student, cousins, neighbors, etc) erotic fiction that is believable as nonfiction, as well. Having worked in radio and television, I have known several people like Brooke. I can also see me as Brooke. When I can put myself in a story, you have won me over.
Great
Very hot brother and sister sex.It needs to be continued with them moving in together & getting it on. Maybe even her getting knocked up would fit in the story-line.
WOW AGAIN
Another fantastic story. Thank You!!
Another great story!
This was awesome. I would have loved for her to give him a blow job when her hand job wasn't working on his first hard on. Great story though.
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