All Comments on 'Chance'

This was very good. Would like to read more of your creative thoughts. Expand on this one??? Is she late??? Do they go further??? It might have bee nice if you had brought in more of her texts or his for that matter. Nice start, go with it.

At the risk of being pedantic, you might consider having someone read your story before publishing. For example you wrote, "It's not like were going out . . ." when you likely meant, "It's not like we're going out . . .".

If you really are a woman, and if this is a real fantasy of yours as you said, does that mean you are still a virgin since this story was told in the first person and the protagonist was a virgin? If so, go out and have sex, then write us a new story and tell us how it was different than what you expected here. And use an editor.

Yeah, I could have put more detail, but it was late at night and I just wanted to finish it.

This was incredibly hot. keep up the work ;) I'd love to read more.