All Comments on 'The Waiting Game'

Well developed Love story.

This was hotter than hell!

One of the best stories I've read on Literotica.

Really, the long stories are bit hard to catch readers, but I loved reading every line of it. You've done a great job of detailing every part. I love the stories with well developed details. Please search for amratinjon here and read my story. It's not as well written as yours, but should be worth giving it a chance. Thank you for the vivid image of the storyline.

I enjoyed every line in this story. The guy's honesty and faithfulness to his girlfriend, and the girls' sensuality? It played out beautifully, and in a way that wouldn't offend people who are bothered by infidelity. You set the stage for the explosion of sexuality after letting it simmer 'just' long enough. You could actually write a sequel to this, if you wanted to, but it's good enough to stand on it's own.

Excellent job.

Great story! I loved it. Best story I've ever read.

Dude, there is no one better on Literotica than you. There may be three or four as good as you but no one is any better. I loved your Bosom Buddies series and this story is just as good. Well done!

If you don't win the contest, there's no justice in this world!!

Beyond the 5, I've added it as a Favorite. Don't know how to give it higher praise.

who are females are great. Good neighbors who are beautiful females with big tits are even better. Good neighbors who are beautiful females with big tits that let you have sex with them are the best.

Great story. Good luck in the Summer Lovin' contest.

A great, great story. Reading it was akin to having my own fantasy. Thanks!

My first submission ever is in this contest but I dont stand a chance against this one. Excellent work!!

The Waiting Game stands as a superb addition to the Bosom Buddies series.

The writing is excellent, the story line superb and the execution great.

Looking forward to your next submission.

In my opinion, it;s not how much you write but how well you write it and you have done admirably well.

Bill

Especially when it makes me laugh out loud. You had me at lasagna. Excellent story.

Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow!

Wow.

Actually my favorite story on this site after many years of reading. Thanks for sharing!

Every girl has giant boobs -- it's like a convention of TV news meteorologists.

In that case, I guess I'll have to start watching the nightly weather report...

This story deserves a sequel.

first story that actually builds up the tension before the fucking. favourite story on the site

Wow. Just wow. I've been reading here for ages but this is the best story I've seen. I thought the convos mike has with his brain are a nice humorous touch. Needs a sequel for sure.

Enjoyed your story very much. A few unexpected bits of humor did have me laughing out loud.

What was the best was the unexpected turns and twists and how it all ended.

Charlie

Absolutely a great read with all the build up and the final ultimate sex scenes, definitely the GAME was worth the WAITING.

I've read many, many stories on this site, by far this one is the best. I was completely sucked (pun intended) into the entire situation!

This was one of the most well developed stories that I have read on this site. I hope you write more awesome stories like this.

Reminds me some great moments!

Claire

Wow. First time I've ever had one of my fictional characters actually bother writing me back. Glad you liked the story!

Amongst the many great stories here, this stands in my top ten! Made me cheer twice! More adventures of this quartet, please!

Niño the Mindboggler

"Please Sir, may I have more?"

Me and my girlfriend are currently in talks about group sex, so stories like this have been torturing me with ideas. There HAS to be more of these four!

Very, very clever; and beautifully written. Respect.

This story is superb. Your writing is witty and you give your characters an original voice. I hope you will take this as compliment, but you are by far the best writer for smut that I have encountered. Seriously, if a collection of these stories were published (and I know you've already done a mind-blowing job with your other series), it would be be a huge hit with male readers. Well, I would buy it anyway. You are doing a magnificent service by writing these stories and I hope you thoroughly enjoyed it.

Funnily enough though, I've found comic book characters to be the best visual representation of these characters. Just me? Well I've got a link below to show you what I mean. The rest can be found be googling 'DC Girls ehentai'. Enjoy.

http://g.e-hentai.org/s/e4a4b3c1a9/365985-16

In the mean time, consider getting a sponsorship from Kleenex.

Hey, thanks so much for your comment. Just out of curiosity, which specific superheroes do you imagine the characters as?

To me, Power Girl fits Tami's description pretty well. This is a heroine who, even in comics, is famous for her bust size. Plus, her spunky hair cut carries some of Tami's fun spirit.

Supergirl, like Sonya, is an absolute babe. She's pretty much the embodiment of blue-eyed blonde hotness.

Claire is interesting- perhaps Jean Grey, or Natasha Romanoff? I really enjoyed the way in which she warmed up to Michael. Having an ravishing chick like Claire with an icy exterior eventually moaning with pleasure is pretty hot.

I don't think I'm allowed to post links, but I really can't resist:

Similar to Tami's "swimsuit" http://g.e-hentai.org/s/0a08e795c8/517732-84

http://g.e-hentai.org/s/1aa5b1dcec/365985-11

Thank heavens for cosplay http://g.e-hentai.org/s/a928b78c61/365985-41

So there's my long and rambling $0.02. I realise this will likely come across as weird to everyone else, and some of their details don't match exactly. But honestly, with the ridiculous amount of fanservice that those writers put into comics, almost every female (hero or otherwise) scores 11 out of 10.

Awesome, thanks for humoring me. I'm always interested to know what's running through a reader's head when they're imagining something I've written. Feel free to shoot me an email if you ever wanna chat. Just please give me some way of responding, if you don't mind.

Loved the way this story built up!

I always look forward to your writings. And again you didnt disappoint. Awesome story, awesome writing and BRILLIANT characters. One of my favourite writers by far!!! Keep it up!

You definitely have the knack, please keep writing!

Please write a part 2 to this story it was great.

Definitely more required. These characters are too hot not to be revisited.

I loved it so much. I hope this happens to me one day;)

an awfully literate, clever story that had a storyline and it was hot, hot, hot, too!

Wonderful reading for any season, but a great one even for a winter time, like now. Very well thought out to be real life situations ... for erotically-inclined and open-minded individuals. Just long enough to set the stage, describe characters and situations with sufficient color and attention to relavent details as needed for the moment - and short enough for a complete, single episode. Now the reader is hooked on the characters, the next episodes are "manditory" to populate the characters new found fan club - at least to fulfil the current movie trend toward trilogies. The pairing possibilities, the togetherness of the four and the natural progression to include past and forward-looking new neighbor/watchers at work and around the pool.

It's in your hand. Come on readers! Send in your encouragement. Help this fine writer achieve even greater potential. Write and vote.

That was awesome and worth every bit of THE WAIT.

Fantastic descriptions and good story line

That was amazing. Hottest story I have read on this site by far !

Love your stories!

This story is the single best short story I've ever read, at least for my particular taste. 10 stars, 20 stars.

I particularly love that the dude wasn't a total asshole and that none of the characters were unrealistically fantasy-like in personality. For example, his girlfriend *was* pissed off that he kissed another girl, and the sexy lesbian roommate neighbour coworkers were scared off by the sudden sex in front of them. Things flowed at just the perfect pace to feel plausibly plausible and yet male-fantasy ideal.

No complaints about writing, grammar, voicing, dialogue, etc. Sure it could be deeper, but only if you took this fairly-tight package and made it into a novel.

A big turn on, oddly my favorite line was when Sonya disappeared into the bedroom and closed the door.

Wow... That was extremely hot, and I loved every sentence of it!!!

Ahahaha great line, and great story :D

One of the best

What a great story. At times I laughed and giggled but I had a wicked smile the whole time. Thank you.

Brilliant

Best story I have ever read! You should do a part 2!!!

One of the best stories I've read on here, and one of the best erotica I've read ever. Engrossed through the whole thing <3 amazingly written and addictive to read with really likeable (and sexy) characters

Fantastic and wonderful fantasy story. Wish it was about me.

Fun story, almost believable and I'm SOOOOOOO jealous!

I really enjoy the way you write, and I especially like your dialogue. It feels human. And the bodies you put together feel heavenly...or they would. They sure LOOK heavenly the way I imagine them. Anyway, I enjoyed the hell out of this story and I look forward to whatever else you have in store.

Thoroughly Interested - Galloglaich

Great story line. Hot action with great descriptions.

I loved the story. You hit my fantasy trifecta of a gal who could kick my ass, an Asian chick, and redhead, all interested in doing me AND each other! Delightful!!

I'm not sure about the Skype-sex, but I never got into it. Possibly b/c I'm too cheap to get a decent webcam, so the resolution never was worth it to me!

Still, s/t I and the wife definitely need to try. Talking to each other does it for us b/c we're old farts that grew up with phone sex, not that we mind visual aids...but never mind the IRL stuff.

You wrote a splendid fantasy sir!

That was by far and a field, one of the best I have ever read. Goddamn so well written. Great characters, I actually felt poor mikey's weeks of tension building up. Fuck, it was excruciating, very well written indeed. FUCK.

Just wanted to say thanks for all the wonderful and encouraging comments people have left in the past year. I appreciate all the multiple exclamation points you've taken the time to type. To anyone who posted anonymously, please shoot me an email so I'll be able to thank you personally.

-Ken

k.pierceerotica@yahoo.com

Especially the pace, just right to reach the edge, then hold off. By the end I though my balls were going to explode and they did. Going to check out some more of your stories when I recover.

Great stuff. I usually prefer the first person stories from the girl's POV, but this was outstanding.

I really liked it; as a girl, I love to know how guys think. I love stories from the male point of view. It was amazing! Keep it up

I've never cum that many times reading one story. I couldn't keep my hands off myself!

I am going to fuck and refuck by wife tonight all the while wishing that Sonya, Mike, Clair, and Tami were all here in bed with us. What fun that would be.

very hot, fucked my girlfriend all the while wishing we could join this group for some hot fun

i don't normally post but his is one of the best stories i have read and a second part would be awesome ..... thank you for sharing

Your story is mindblowingly like one of my fulfilled fantasies. My wife and two beautiful women spent a glorious afternoon much like your coming together. I wish it would happen again and again, but those are one in a life time happenings. Why can't we all get together like that, all the time?

Incredible. My girl friend came time after time. Her roommate came home and I pulled her into a threesome. She only complained a little bit when I slowly entered her anus as she laid on her roommate, sucking her clit. This story makes us climax several times whenever any of us read it aloud....

Oh my gosh. I needed a good story. It was long but so well worth it. I am dripping wet and would love to be a part of this story as any of the ladies.

That was fantastic. Well written and every man's dream come true.

bill...

I really liked your story. Part two please!

Just wonderful what a great story

Creative, sexy, and HOTT! Thank you.

Incredibly sensual and sublimely temptuous and tantalizing tale! Definitely up to your usual high standard.

Oh, gosh. I think I'm gonna cum again...

and three men. Seems like it would have to get kind of gay (shudder). Girl on girl, OK. Guy on guy? Not so much.

are not enough!

It can be hard to find a good group sex with a shot ton of bi girls such as myself. Hehehe if you ever need one I'm a person 😉

...that is all.

Made me cum along with them!

Hot sex, great anticipation, wonderful dialog.

Love this one!

I loved this

I kept waiting for him to be kicked out as his GF joined the other two

Please and many thanks?

You are a master wordsmith and story teller!

But saw several errors of "I vs me". It is a common mistake to use subjective "I" when objective "me" is appropriate.

Strong plot, a decent amount of character development and lots of hot scenes.

One jarring thing that I did notice on the final page though was that Michael describes Sonya, his girlfriend, as "the lovely blonde" in "... pulling the lovely blonde's crotch towards her face".

I sounds very odd for him to describe his girlfriend in such a way and makes it sound as if Michael is no longer narrating the story.

Fantastic story, and I mean Story, with a plot that developed and real characters that, while I didn't grow to care about them, at least they weren't just interchangeable tits & ass.

I have to laugh at the fact that the only thing the nit-pickers find wrong is that your PoV gets swapped a few times. Well done!

J

A good story. Good plot, good characters, hot scenes. Thanks

Excellently written and postively erotic!

my favorite story ever, esspecially after sonya arrived

The characters were developed with a tease all the way through. The story is captivating as the emotions and thoughts flow with ease. Some parts are just a riot and deliciously funny. If there were any grammatical errors I didn't see any. Extremely well written and edited. For a short 6 page story on this site I would rate this as number 1. I don't think anyone could write a better story or execute as well. My chair is quite wet so I better take care of a serious matter. Thanks so much for a wonderful read.

WOW! what a story! well written with a wonderfully playful tone, fun characters, and imaginative, HOT action. to top it off, i think it's the first sexy story that's ever made me laugh- love it.

Maybe the best I've read on this site.

The fact that he didn't cheat on Sonya and then the way it unfolded made this a gem in the coalfield because I hate cheating and casual stuff and group sex category is mostly about them. So this one is special.

That was super hot. Kept me rock hard the whole time, and I came like a champ at the end. This was my ultimate fantasy.