All Comments on 'Kathrina's Celebration'

by sylverwolfe

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Good idea, but editorial help could improve your story considerably!

The basic concept of your story-- a rebellious daughter, dragged to a social event she dislikes by her very proper father, does her best to have fun while outraging her elders-- is fine. However, you clearly need some help with grammar and spelling, which an editor could provide. Also, I wonder how fast you wrote and posted this story, because it seems to have been dashed off without a second thought, let alone a second draft. Take a little more time, get a little help and your work will improve!

By the way, how did Kathrina's tyrannical father fail to notice that his daughter was not taking her place at the duchess's formal dinner? How did it happen that two young men of Italian (noble? gentle?) descent, one of whom was either a locksmith or a burglar, were at the party? Curious minds want to know!

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