A Gift From His Father Ch. 10

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cant wait for the next chapter

awsome

This was an awesome chapter. Can't wait to find out if Rachel meets John, and if she remembers what happened the day before.

Nice!

Very nice chapter!
Hope to read more soon!

great story. hope more is cuming

He's Back!

I was beginning to give up hope. Please continue!

YES!

Great chapter! I am glad to see you back. Hope there is more on the way. Thank you for continuing.

Very Good

Like the Revenge Candace got on Rachel and her Husband. Will be interesting to see if Rachel gets in shape and becomes Rachels little pussy slave.

Wow

Thanks for your time...great chapter!!

Really?

"Depending on the feedback I may continue with the story a little longer. This will not be the final chapter."

Hmmm, not the final chapter, but probably gonna remain unfinished. That's a little contradictory, don't you think? Not to mention insulting to your readers. What, we don't stroke your ego enough with feedback and accolades you've gotten so far? For what it's worth, I was thoroughly enjoying your tale till I caught that little tidbit I quoted from the beginning of chapter 10, but your hubris and conceit are ridiculous. Do you honestly think you're Stephen King or Dean Koontz? You're good dude, but you're nowhere NEAR good enough to demand things like that from us. This is a free site. Post your works and be happy with the responses you get, otherwise, don't waste our time.

Thanks for the warning, though. I'll stay away from your works now, however good they may be. I've said it before and I'll say it again here... I have NO patience with, nor do I have time to waste, on fickle and absentee authors.

Posted

Thanks for the feedback, Chapter 11 has been submitted and waiting for Literotica to do it's thing before posting. I have a lot of fun writing these stories. It is a little work but truly a labor of love. I only wish I could write faster for you, but life has a way of making demands. Nevertheless, I will continue to make time and write, I hope you enjoy.

Great

Glad that you've been able to continue - looking fotward to reading more :)

Intrigued

Good story . Great detail. Can't wait to read more!

Marvelous story

Very good from the beginning and this chapter not exemption. I am waiting for more.

now it has just gotten silly

this is no longer a story, it is a total cluster f*&#k

Please don't submit anymore of this poorly written gratuitous drivel. But, if you absolutely insist, Please, Please, Please have someone who speaks English edit and proof read your text.

this chapter has absolutely nothing to do with the original story line and has taken the thread so far afield it is unrecognizable.

A crying shame

You've gone from a story with an interesting plot to a cheap no budget porno. If this continues, I'm done.

second time reading

this is the second time I am reading this and I love it this time just as much as I did the first time I read it great story and what Candace did to Rachel was great I think I would have done a little more but I am a guy so I would have more fun making her husband watch as I fucked his wife and gave her a climax like he never could and then I would make it were she could not climax unless it was me fucking her

Grammar

As others have previously said you need to look at your grammar and spelling, otherwise a very good story

Im jealous

I wish i was him

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