Games of Elfkind Ch. 03

nice start

just raced trough the first 3 chapters and i am starting to like it
i am also more interested in the old world of cade. so maybe some flashbacks to show us more of the wonderfull setting you have created for us.

continue writing this series because i can't wait for the next chapter
good work

bringing Elisa in

Have Elisa already been brought to the fae realm days after her expulsion and she meets with Cad again

more

Very good start. I hope you will write more and soon!

Its a nice story so far, though you could maybe give about slightly more background info on the world here and there, although you may have that planning in later chapters.
Second thing is that the chapters are kind of short, you could have made this into one read easily.

Nice Start

Nice start to your story. I am glad you decided to ditch the attempt at archaic speech. All the thee's and thou's and wilt and canst and so on work well if you are good at it, but it was obviously something that you had not had a lot of practice with. It is always better to avoid attempting to write any sort of dialect unless or until you have mastered it, otherwise the impact is likely not to be what you intend. Poorly handled, it bogs down your story rather than creating atmosphere. Normal dialogue works far better, in most cases.

need more

GREAT story....needs more storyline....looking forward to seeing more....The sex is good, also.