All Comments on 'Cannot be'

by LesseloovesPeter

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LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years agoAuthor

Soooo, I wrote this while drunk, and I thought I titled it 'drunken words' not sure I like the title, sounds so dark.

Ashesh9Ashesh9over 10 years ago
some lines are deep but the hazy , unfocussed

nature of the drunken mind prevents the writin' from reachin' ur usual levels of excellence : sorry

Oldbear63Oldbear63over 10 years ago
It's good...

Are you always an unhappy drunk? Words that come from the subconscious are usually valid - and maybe need to get out there...

LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years agoAuthor

It was more writing about being angry when drunk then actually writing while drunk and angry. I'm actually a pretty happy drunk.

I agree, not my best stuff but I'm challenging myself to write everyday, and they can't all be winners I guess lol!

todski28todski28over 10 years ago
Next try one

On acid, I'm sure you'd get some interesting imagery ;-)

Not a bad little experiment lol

Final stanza is the true meat the rest is gravy though as ash said, not very good gravy.

On a side note thanks for the time you put in posting comments it is time consuming and the feedback often inspires new writers to stay. Ashesh and Erectus123 are the main reason I stayed

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