Archaeology Research Yields Ch. 03

Good stuff, but I'd like to see the individual installments longer. Take your time to build up the scene.

Thats

What i meant by Slowing down in the second chapter it sounded like the Guy was going to take over the Island at least the whole crew he worked with. But he needs to think of the Long term and also What he will do in the Future. Maybe get Katie to focus on her Body and w/o his help start doing what it Takes to compete.

bit rushed

Its all still a bit rushed. Also with his new powers so far all he's done is make the camp slut his slut. He hasn't really made her do anything yet that wasn't already there in her head. Also there has to be a payback for him. Power like this will have consequences, they always do, but still I have to say I did enjoy the story

good start

i am liking the idea behind the story and the sex scenes are good. maybe spend time in each chapter exploring new uses or consequences of spells from the book. maybe more artifacts or art showing a great mage powerful and scary and his downfall or mystery of his disappearance. make the sex last a little bit longer and maybe get a bit kinkier. keep on with the submission though and the pavlovistic training through orgasms. loved it.