Good story, but you have a couple of problems with homonyms. A "taught (trained or educated) ass" is what Kala will have at the end of her anal training. What she has at the beginning is a "taut (firm and well-shaped) ass".
Also, when you are squeezing her buttocks, you're KNEADING them. When you absolutely can't wait to start squeezing her buttocks, you're NEEDING them.
5 inch diameter butt plug. Never going to happen except to a size queen! A coke can is about 2-1/2 inches in diameter, also probably larger than a newbie can handle comfortably. On the other hand, a 5 inch CIRCUMFERENCE butt plug is only 1-1/2 inches in diameter. Much more reasonable.
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Anonymous09/19/13
Crap writing
Totally illiterate. One. (It hurts more than zero)
this story isnt remotly "femdom". it is a male dominating (trying to)a female
and that is called maledom. femdom is the other way around so please read into the definitions of the tags you are using
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Anonymous09/22/13
too short
seriously, you can't stop in the middld of a story like that...
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Anonymous10/07/13
great
Can't wait to see how she ends up taking it all, don't quit!
English
Oh Hell Yes!!!
Great beginning! Now on to the next part.
5 inch diameter?
Check your numbers. That's insanely huge.
Homonym problems
Good story, but you have a couple of problems with homonyms. A "taught (trained or educated) ass" is what Kala will have at the end of her anal training. What she has at the beginning is a "taut (firm and well-shaped) ass".
Also, when you are squeezing her buttocks, you're KNEADING them. When you absolutely can't wait to start squeezing her buttocks, you're NEEDING them.
OK, Butt for the.....
5 inch diameter butt plug. Never going to happen except to a size queen! A coke can is about 2-1/2 inches in diameter, also probably larger than a newbie can handle comfortably. On the other hand, a 5 inch CIRCUMFERENCE butt plug is only 1-1/2 inches in diameter. Much more reasonable.
Crap writing
Totally illiterate. One. (It hurts more than zero)
work on your tags
this story isnt remotly "femdom". it is a male dominating (trying to)a female
and that is called maledom. femdom is the other way around so please read into the definitions of the tags you are using
too short
seriously, you can't stop in the middld of a story like that...
great
Can't wait to see how she ends up taking it all, don't quit!
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