You're Eighteen Now

Clock-radio should have been a tag for this story. The best line was the last one. :)

Lol at FA_JF. Needed that laugh!

Wtf doona?

Maybe include an explanation of what a "doona" is if you're going to refer to it a billion times.
Apparently (according to google) it's an Australian term for a blanket. Good story otherwise.

good one ;)

it was an alright story, not the most erotic ive read on here for sure but that last bit made me laugh. im glad you didnt go for the common "im so happy you did that, it was great!" and then she proceeds to fuck him again with free will... so boring now. but good one, good times.

As I've said

Great writer of the funny punch line .
Erotic as a bag of crisps , but who cares.
Love ' em

Doona Google it

It's an Australian word for comforter. If you're going to be ignorant on something just because it doesn't have to do with American culture, the least you could do is make sure it's your own ignorance before you start bugging the author about it.

Also, it should have been obvious what it was from the way it was used in the story. Get over it.

Have to address this comment that was made and reference

The Doona was completely given away in the face of what it was being used for in the story.
First rule, if you don't know what a word is or means, look it up.
As an American, myself, I take exception to the comment about Americans.
Before referencing them all as being ignorant or otherwise, choose your words wisely.
As for the negative comments Ashson, just ignore them.
There is constructive criticism then there is rudeness, which that person happens to be.
There are many idiots in the world and unfortunately there are more that make a point of writing negative comments on stories just to make themselves feel better. Sending the comment in as Anonymous is a cowardly thing to do and I suggest that all negative comments by people that cannot even leave their name be disregarded.
Good job with the story and I very much appreciated this awakening of a young girl and the clock between the eyes! *smiles*

Rape

Good for her, hope she broke his head with the clock radio and called her father in with his shotgun blowing the bastards cock off.