Your writing style, grammar, and spelling in English is better than many who only speak English, so it was not noticeable that this was not your primary language.
I found the story hot and erotic, but was a little put off by two references that made this almost a homosexual experience for the point of view character. After reading your biography, I realized that this could have been a true story, but with a different gender for the other character. I enjoyed the story more with the other character being female, as you have written it.
Please write again.
aries: yeah, its a story about male submission, as the description mentions.
deep: thanks for the feedback! the story is completely made up, ive never been with a woman, this is just pure imagination. i never thought of the female character as anything else but completely female, but i guess my background and perspective shine through. i will definitely publish more.
Short and sweet, getting right to the good part. The submission of the guy is very erotic... Would love to read more like this from you.
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Anonymous10/17/13
An old American cowboy
Again you write a beautiful story and yes I agree, it is not always about ones self but what one can do for another. Even though I have never thought of myself as gay I do love giving myself for my partners enjoyment. I think if I knew you hylas_ I would like to do for you.
xoxo
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Anonymous06/02/16
Great story.
It was pretty hot, I liked how you described the woman and your writing is impeccable.
English
Hot and erotic
Your writing style, grammar, and spelling in English is better than many who only speak English, so it was not noticeable that this was not your primary language.
I found the story hot and erotic, but was a little put off by two references that made this almost a homosexual experience for the point of view character. After reading your biography, I realized that this could have been a true story, but with a different gender for the other character. I enjoyed the story more with the other character being female, as you have written it.
Please write again.
So he is proud to eat some other guy's cum and proud to be treated as a whore?
thx for the feedback
aries: yeah, its a story about male submission, as the description mentions.
deep: thanks for the feedback! the story is completely made up, ive never been with a woman, this is just pure imagination. i never thought of the female character as anything else but completely female, but i guess my background and perspective shine through. i will definitely publish more.
Nice
Short and sweet, getting right to the good part. The submission of the guy is very erotic... Would love to read more like this from you.
An old American cowboy
Again you write a beautiful story and yes I agree, it is not always about ones self but what one can do for another. Even though I have never thought of myself as gay I do love giving myself for my partners enjoyment. I think if I knew you hylas_ I would like to do for you.
xoxo
Great story.
It was pretty hot, I liked how you described the woman and your writing is impeccable.
23.11.16: Replaced the original text with a cleaned up version. Edited by malefica, thank you for your work!
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