Fucking my Lonely Aunt Kate

Good Read.

Good start. Would like to see you continue this story

Wow, you need an editor.

The grammar in this was terrible.

Try using English

You'll get a lot more readers. This was worse than awful.

BAD

THAT IS AS POLITE AS IT GETS BECAUSE IT WAS REALLY FUC.ING AWFUL

Get an editor

...and a beta reader. A poor story made worse by appalling grammar and spelling.

horrible

please ask for help

Your use of the English language is atrocious. Yes, I am proud to be a member of the grammar police. You need help! If you don't realize it that makes it even worse.

Good story line...But!

I'm not going to sugar coat my comments because doing so won't help you, just as saying it's bad will be of no use when you try another story. So here goes: If aunt had just gotten out of the shower why does she later have panties on? I'm not sure, but I think you messed up on verb tense a few times. (check layed for example.) Always use (') to show possession. (Ex. aunty's) Always read the finished product over out loud. You'll be surprised at the errors you'll catch. For the final step, I always print my stories then give one final check for errors. It may just be me, but I catch errors faster in print than from the monitor. In a recent 10,000 word story I found over a dozen errors after I'd okayed it on the monitor. Who knows how many I missed? I hope someone will tell me when I get it in print so my next one can be better. I'd suggest you make use of the writer's tips Literotica provides. As others suggested, an editor may be useful, but I really think you should put more work in this story before the editor since you would probably just make suggested changes. DON'T GET DISCOURAGED AND QUIT. YOU HAVE A GOOD STORY THAT JUST NEEDS WORK. This advice is worth just what it cost you.

Good intent, horrible execution.

While the story idea was good it's obvious that English is your second language. Your grammar couldn't be much worse. If you attempt another story please have someone read/edit it who speaks English as their first language before you submit it.

It was pretty bad!

I gave you two stars, but that was pure charity. You might want to find a better use for your time.

Yes it's obviously written by an ESL, but given that it's not as bad as some attempts. The syntax and structure are a mess though.

a good start

Just keep writing and you'll get better

good ====C

good start but... GRAMMER FIX IT. IT'S LIKE A 7TH GRADER WROTE IT. Other then that i liked the story.

Minus Two

Please, Lit, change the system so we can give a zero rating. (Or, in this case, less than zero!)

Wow

You rushed into it way too fast, you have to let the lust & want build up. Your grammar was very bad also but not the worst i've seen. I give you 2 stars for the effort.

Damn

Sorry but to wank able

fucking perverts without morals at all

what now already over cuntjuice.

gave it a 5 to help offset the

asshole annony!!!!