All Comments on 'Fucking my Lonely Aunt Kate'

Good start. Would like to see you continue this story

The grammar in this was terrible.

You'll get a lot more readers. This was worse than awful.

THAT IS AS POLITE AS IT GETS BECAUSE IT WAS REALLY FUC.ING AWFUL

...and a beta reader. A poor story made worse by appalling grammar and spelling.

horrible

Your use of the English language is atrocious. Yes, I am proud to be a member of the grammar police. You need help! If you don't realize it that makes it even worse.

I'm not going to sugar coat my comments because doing so won't help you, just as saying it's bad will be of no use when you try another story. So here goes: If aunt had just gotten out of the shower why does she later have panties on? I'm not sure, but I think you messed up on verb tense a few times. (check layed for example.) Always use (') to show possession. (Ex. aunty's) Always read the finished product over out loud. You'll be surprised at the errors you'll catch. For the final step, I always print my stories then give one final check for errors. It may just be me, but I catch errors faster in print than from the monitor. In a recent 10,000 word story I found over a dozen errors after I'd okayed it on the monitor. Who knows how many I missed? I hope someone will tell me when I get it in print so my next one can be better. I'd suggest you make use of the writer's tips Literotica provides. As others suggested, an editor may be useful, but I really think you should put more work in this story before the editor since you would probably just make suggested changes. DON'T GET DISCOURAGED AND QUIT. YOU HAVE A GOOD STORY THAT JUST NEEDS WORK. This advice is worth just what it cost you.

While the story idea was good it's obvious that English is your second language. Your grammar couldn't be much worse. If you attempt another story please have someone read/edit it who speaks English as their first language before you submit it.

I gave you two stars, but that was pure charity. You might want to find a better use for your time.

Yes it's obviously written by an ESL, but given that it's not as bad as some attempts. The syntax and structure are a mess though.

Just keep writing and you'll get better

good start but... GRAMMER FIX IT. IT'S LIKE A 7TH GRADER WROTE IT. Other then that i liked the story.

Please, Lit, change the system so we can give a zero rating. (Or, in this case, less than zero!)

You rushed into it way too fast, you have to let the lust & want build up. Your grammar was very bad also but not the worst i've seen. I give you 2 stars for the effort.

Sorry but to wank able

what now already over cuntjuice.

asshole annony!!!!

I enjoyed your writing! I encourage you to continue writing, after all 'practice makes perfect, no!'. If anyone can't offer constructive critique, screw 'em and the horse they rode on! Best of luck to you!

This story is so fuckin close to my life my name is craig and I fuck my aunt all the time but her tits are 38 DD and much more fun

I was stayingover night at my aunts.she is a widow.she is still a attractive woman.she has taken care of herself.she doesent drink or smoke& she has never done drugs.she is 50 years old&she wears loose summer dresses.i was in my bedroom reading before I went to sleep.she came in with her robe on.she let the robe fall off.she was naked.she looked 50 years old but she had a nice figure.she said I know this is bold but I need a piece of tail bad I haven't had sex in a long time.please fuck me I need you bad.my aunt screwed the hell out of me that night.i could not pass this up I moved in with her.we have a great time she is a great woman.she got a facelift&looks younger&pretty.I love my aunt.

I fucked moms sister Mary a year after my uncle Bob died suddenly in his 40s...Mary was the opposite of mom, tall and slim with huge tits and long blonde hair...it happened after a family party when she stayed over after drinking too much - unbeknown to me , mom had put her in my room for the night and I didn't know until I staggered in at 1 am ( I didn't see the note mom left for me!! )

I went into my room and undressed in the dark before sliding into bed still not knowing she was there,....imagine my shock when I felt an arm slide onto my bare chest , and a husky voice whispering ' ohh Bob' ...I recognised the voice immediately and leapt out of bed and put on the light ...there she was , laying spread eagled and naked, hand between her legs gently rubbing her smooth cunt!! ( aunt or not , I couldn't stop my cock from springing up)...I knelt on the edge and watched her as she brought herself off.....as she came I leaned over and kissed her on the lips....she responded by dragging me down and I mounted her.....I fucked her til we both orgasmed , then left and went to the couch downstairs...next morning she winked at me at breakfast and told me to come see her at home later!!...we fucked again in her bed ..and many times after

It was in the late summer 2016 i was 16 years old my aunt told me she was going to sleep so i said good night , after a while i wanted to go to the bathroom and the bathroom was beside my aunts room so i went as quitely and quickly as possible after i Was done i went to sleep ... the next day it was like 7:20 am my aunt was still asleep she was sleeping on her back with nothing on so i went there and kissed her on the cheek she was still asleep so i went down and started kissing my aunts pussy she didnt even notice , i took off my clothes and started jerking off then i went above her put my dick in her raw pussy and starting fucking her , suddenly she woke up and said WHAT ARE U DOING i said im sry i pulled of my dick and she said i know u want ur Aunts pussy come and do whatever u want so i fucked her for about 1 hour and filled her pussy with cum and she was happy i did this everyday and sometimes 2 times a day she was happy and she thanked me

PS : None of the above is true :)

Bloody rubbish!!

Liked the story but tell true story went over to my aunts she is 45 and me 24.when I got there knocked on her door no answer.I opened it herd noise coming from down hall where her bedrooms was.walked down looked she was getting fucked by someguy he had condom on.she was riding up and down on him when came then he did they finished she got off pulled condom off him sucked his cock clean.he got dressed to leave he said see you tomorrow.I sat in the kitchen where they both came out she was naked.they both looked at me my aunt screamed ran back down the hall and I looked at the guy if I ever catch you around again make sure my uncle knows ran out door got in his car left.my aunt on her bed looked at me said you bastard what did you say.told him to come around and now for you take off that robe she got up grabbed her pushed back on the bed took off my shirt and shorts got top of her rammed my cock up in her hairy cunt.told me take it out I cab get pregnant and I said that's my goal get you pregnant once banged her good she said don't said to late cum inside her cunt.then told her you belong to me now and two weeks later she got pregnant with my kid now I fuck her everyday cum inside her and she learned to have me and my friends gangbang her every day getting fucked bareback.she end up having three more kids pop out of her cunt plus we take care of her for expenses.

I believe in having sex with ny mom aunt aunt sister. All 3 have massive tits extra large brown nipples both aunt and mom have hairy cynts where hair runs up back of their ass. Then my sister her cunt hair isn't that thick but getting there both older woman are 45 and 48 my sister 20 yrs of age me 28. We all live in same house three of them always go down on each other in 3 way and I watch until I walked up to my sister rammed my cock in her cunt bareback.told time to get you pregnant once I let go my cum in her that's one then got the other two put loads of cum in their cunts.couple days go by all3 of them said well you did all 3 of us are pregnant stud now what.I said you 3 are only going to be with me no one else.we agreed once they each had kids they fixed now we still have are fun plus go on vacations to nudist resorts.there guys that want to fuck them.I told these 3 only due gangbangs once guys hear that all 3 due end fucked for the day with sore cunts and ass.

Exciting story. .I do not understand why some critics are negative, The author must surely do not have English as his first language and not many people CAN BE A GOOD AUTHOR! Anyway,I fully understood his words which allowed me to have a good boner,jack my cock several times and cum. .Personally, in my teenage, I used to peep at my mother's elder sister, aged 38 at that time when she was in the bathroom. ..She had(she still has a gorgeous body )It was in my dreams and jacking sessions that I could fuck her.15 years later when I was 20 and her 45 I succeeded to really fuck her.She was then divorced and it happened after a party at her home and when I had to stay for the weekend .So we had all a very good time with dancing,jokes, food and drinks and when everybody had gone,my aunt Joanne, continued to drink and I shall never forget when we danced on Peccy Sledge song"When a man loves a woman ",We hugged each other very tightly, .rubbing my my boner with her pussy, with our dresses on.my two hands caressing her two butt's and when I started to sweetly Luss her neck and ears ,she started to moan and she did same to me, just as the song finished, she laid on the sofa with her feet on and opened her legs I could see her beautiful white soaked panties. I knelt down, kissed where the panties were were.I put her string on one side and sucked her well trimmed pussy abd when I "attacked"her clitoris she started to cry like a beast..I tore her panties and pulled out my hard cock from my jean and fucked and fucked her wildly. She cummed and cumned till a my cock shot 6 loads of cum into her burning pussy. ,After that, we undressed completely and we fucked like rabbits during 2 hours and in all sorts of positions. We then slept and fucked again when we woke up.we left the sofa only when we had to take our shower, we took a small lunch and we the went into her room where we continued to fuck and fuck. We left the bed just to eat something ,That was a fantastic weekend and it happened 2 years ago. I have now moved in into her house. For other siblings and friends I moved there because my working place was not that do far from her house. Outside we are simply an aunt and a nephew but in the house we are lovers.!!

Given the grammar and lack of understanding, it sounds like a 13 year old wrote this.