I thought the first half of the story, especially, was really well written and moved fast. The dialogue was very appropriate and added to the enjoyment of the story. On the downside, I thought the last third of the story was skimpy and lacked "substance"....almost as if it was a quick attempt to wrap it up.
Thanks for your hard work and dedication. I'm sure these stories take considerable time and effort.
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Very well written! Kudos.
I thought the first half of the story, especially, was really well written and moved fast. The dialogue was very appropriate and added to the enjoyment of the story. On the downside, I thought the last third of the story was skimpy and lacked "substance"....almost as if it was a quick attempt to wrap it up.
Thanks for your hard work and dedication. I'm sure these stories take considerable time and effort.
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