Thunderstorm Threesome

Awesome!

Thanks for another great story!

I loved it! Such a fun story and I was so glad Allie ended up with just Ethan at the end!

Minor quirks

I found the overuse of "pool rat" to be somewhat annoyingly repetitious. And unless my eyes are tricking me (entirely possible, I'm sleep deprived) it looks like you repeated an entire section, so you might want to proofread. Otherwise, I loved it. You actually wrote like an intelligent person, and it was sexy without being crude. I give you a 4.98 out of 5. :)

Great Story

Thanks Darlin, I always enjoy reading your stories

Incredibly hot! Gorgeous scene, gorgeous men, who could ask for more? Thanks.

Excellent!!

I have read a large number of your stories, and I must say, that this one had what was probably both the most entertaining and most realistic narrative. Well done, Angel!
:-)

I noticed the repeated section

but still gave this five stars. I loved the Oklahoma reference. Very hot. Well done!

Bravo!!

You should write more stories like this. You should also write what happens with Allie and Ethan.

Plagiarism

Plagiarism

You know it is plagiarism to steal stories from other writers right? Changing the names of the people in the story doesn't make it yours

Peaches and Cream Boy

Hi,

This is goldeniangel... I just saw your comment on Thunderstorm Threesome and I wanted to know what you were talking about, because this is DEFINITELY my story and I have definitely been having trouble with other people plagiarizing my work and putting it on other sites. This is 100% MY story, I have not plagiarized it and I worked damn hard on it.

I also post on booksiesilk, if that's the site you saw, then that is also me. If it's another site, please let me know ASAP at goldeniangel@gmail.com so that I can contact the site master and let them know that someone is posting MY work under their name.

Thank you,

~Angel

Very hot!

I'm glad Allie got with Ethan in the end.

I also noticed the double paragraphs where Allie is taking off her cover-up.

Thanks!

love a sweet ending sometimes

as i said, sometimes a happy ending in more than the erotic sense makes it even better :) wats with the plagerism comment?

Sopharoones

Still trying to figure it out because PeachesandCream hasn't gotten back to me. So either he's just a troll or he just has no intention of actually following up with his comments like that. Unfortunately people plagiarizing my work has become more and more of an issue lately. I do appreciate it when people let me know, it's a serious thing, so it doesn't bother me that he's trying to stop plagiarism (if he's not a troll) but it's definitely bothering me that he's not responded to my return comment OR the email I sent him.

Maybe Peaches and Cream...

...is an idiot and didn't realize you were quoting your own work in the story?

Radiodemon

OMG I didn't even realize he might be referring to the "quote" that Ethan reads from Allie's kindle book!!! Thank you for pointing that out!

Yes, in case anyone is wondering, that's from the Venus Rising Quartet that's available on Amazon and is, also, written by me. I was amusing myself by having one of my characters read another one of my stories LOL. So, while it is word for word from a different story (although I didn't change the names), it is STILL my original work.

W O W

Ethan is fucking hot I can't even aahdhfbsbacavbdbdvs amazing writing, love the buildup.

Clever and Hot

Very clever weaving the excerpt from the Venus series into the story. Lots of subtle build ups and plenty of heat. Well done...as I've come to expect from you.

Plagiarism

I think this comment started it:
Great Story Thanks Darlin
(Darlin write The reluctant journey.)
That and that this story is very similar to the treesome in The Venus school of sex.
Somebody just lost their way on the site.

Wow...

Great story, but I do have one complaint - there is a section of text (six paragraphs) on page 2 that is repeated twice in a row (Another little growl and my head is tipped back and Ethan's mouth lowers to mine --> the utter, throbbing need that's pulsing in me has overwhelmed any other sensation. ). I would love to see a follow-up story!

The best story on here

I have read a lot of these stories, and yours is by far the best I've read. The characters are genuine and believable - and Allie is likeable and reminds me of me (I wish!). It's seriously sexy, but with emotion as well which makes it all the more powerful. I hope to read more of your work. Thank you.

Brlliant touch...

Putting your story into another of your stories! Its very Stephen King, and I love it. Thank you for this beautiful story. Can we see more of Ethan and Allie please? thank you

Great Story

Love the story and the change in character of Mitch and Ethan after they find out what Allie was reading. Will we get to see more of Allie and Ethan? Maybe some BDSM that Allie was fantasizing about?

Oh my fucking god!!!!

This is like perfect, I loved reading it, now only if my hubby made my threesome fantasy come true lol.

Keep on writing, I love reading all your stories!!!!

Great story!!!

This is a really fantastic story!! It is so realistic and HOT!!! My favourite thing about this story is that I can actually tell from the description that it was written by a woman...made me realise how seemingly rare that is on Literotica!

I do have one minor quibble, which is that the term "pool rat" is exceedingly unerotic and (to my mind) far overused in this story. I want to underline that this story was otherwise awesome!!

Amazing!

I love this story so much. I love how realistic it is and the progression of the characters throughout. I ship Ellie so hard. I love the fact that there was a romantic aspect, so many of these stories are just sex with no depth. Overall, this is by far my favorite story! I would love love love to see more like this!!!

Romance + group sex = amazing

I think this may be my favorite story on the site. What woman hasn't had this fantasy? Thank you so much, Goldeniangel!

First story of yours I've read. WOW !

Girl, you can really write some sexy story. I love how you describe all the thoughts going through her head. Not just hot, but fucking hot !! Whew. I need to jerk off ! I'm hard as a rock & can't wait to read more of your offerings. Well done. Definitely a 5.