All Comments on 'sibilant seduction'

is to be so lost in lust ..........

Whoa , Tod ....beware La Femme sans Merci ........5-ed !

and very well written. You've matched the pacing of the poem to its meaning and that is very very good. The whole sssseduction unfolds for the reader through a haze of lust. And if that isn't good erotic writing, I don't know what is.

A couple of nitpicks: 1) I don't think you need the "is" in that last line in the second section because it takes the whole section from showing to telling. If you take it out, you'll need a comma after "flesh" in the previous line, but you'll have a smooth sustained image then. Just my thought. :-)

2) You do a similar thing in the last line by adding the phrase "to prize." It does tell the reader what you think, that all this is yours to prize, but do you really need to tell us? Everything else up to this point has given that message. And if you take it out and do something like, "her cries and sighs. Mine." you have erotica that ends not with words that have thoughts attached to them but with sounds. That can be a powerful way to end the poem. Just some food for thought.

Otherwise it is wonderful and I love how you worked that "s" sound. I also love that first line.

I really can't say much but wow to this one... The words are potent, powerful, and drawing from me desire and lust