I hope you'll continue to write. It seems like you have a style to develop. This was very evocative, almost poetic. Realizing it wasn't going to be a "typical" piece, which I mean as a good thing, I just sat back to let it unfold, but then it was over and I was unsure where you were aiming. Unless you mean for it to be an origin story for a recurring character, I'm almost puzzled. It started moodily, almost dreamily, and had some of the most elegant imagery, but then it stumbled and was gone. I still gave it 4**** because the writing is really quite extraordinary.
Thank you, Blythe_Arimaze. For the “description” of this story I wrote, “Some episodes of erotic humiliation.” It might’ve been better to write “vignettes” where I wrote “episodes.” In any case, I’m grateful for your words of praise and appraisal.
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I hope you'll continue to write. It seems like you have a style to develop. This was very evocative, almost poetic. Realizing it wasn't going to be a "typical" piece, which I mean as a good thing, I just sat back to let it unfold, but then it was over and I was unsure where you were aiming. Unless you mean for it to be an origin story for a recurring character, I'm almost puzzled. It started moodily, almost dreamily, and had some of the most elegant imagery, but then it stumbled and was gone. I still gave it 4**** because the writing is really quite extraordinary.
Thank you, Blythe_Arimaze
Thank you, Blythe_Arimaze. For the “description” of this story I wrote, “Some episodes of erotic humiliation.” It might’ve been better to write “vignettes” where I wrote “episodes.” In any case, I’m grateful for your words of praise and appraisal.
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