You have started an incredibly sensual, exciting, and hot story but....
you played it down to an almost boring story that starts weakly and stays there. There is no character development or description to excite us readers. I am very, very turned on by mature women who have lived and loved. As more often then not, the romance and mind blowing sex is a thing of the past. However, when someone pays the appropriate attention to them, they can match the lust and excitement of sexual interludes or romances. I hope you will create people here who have needs, desires, regained happiness, and personal experiences that will put that magic glow in her eyes indicating passion she is anxious to consummate.
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Needs at least one more chapter..great writing!!
Very nice start to an extended story line
We'll await more to your excellent short work, please continue!
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You have started an incredibly sensual, exciting, and hot story but....
you played it down to an almost boring story that starts weakly and stays there. There is no character development or description to excite us readers. I am very, very turned on by mature women who have lived and loved. As more often then not, the romance and mind blowing sex is a thing of the past. However, when someone pays the appropriate attention to them, they can match the lust and excitement of sexual interludes or romances. I hope you will create people here who have needs, desires, regained happiness, and personal experiences that will put that magic glow in her eyes indicating passion she is anxious to consummate.
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