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by Oakshand09/30/13

Awesome

This we an extremely well written story except for a few typos and grammatical errors that plague every story. Thankly none of them were that bad to actually interrupt the story. You did very well capturing exactly how the family sucked without being repetitive and boring. You added in details about the son and mother but not so much that my attention was drawn away from the father and daughter which i felt were the two main supporting characters. All in all this was a well done story. Keep writing!

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by Anonymous11/18/13

critics need to edit themselves

"thankly" ? the word is "thankfully" . people who live in glass houses shouldn't throw rocks.

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