All Comments on 'A Demon...Or Two Just For Me Ch. 04'

by Reddestiny921

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katgoddess1katgoddess1over 10 years ago

I had a hard time deciding how to rate this chapter. I have been generally rating you high for your creative and interesting story. But it is sometimes difficult to understand what you mean because of the way your sentences are structured. An editor could help with that.

EvilpandaqueenEvilpandaqueenover 10 years ago
when is the next chapter of Angel of mine coming?

Just seems like its been a while

ariesgirlariesgirlover 10 years ago

On the fence with this chapter. I'm not sure if I like this part of the story.

willieonewillieoneover 10 years ago
Interesting

You seem to have gotten of track a bit since chapter one but will keep reading to see where the story goes. Look forward to the next chapter....soon please...

MabelCinnamonMabelCinnamonover 10 years ago
I'm just really confused

I have to keep reading the story over and over again. What's going on?

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
i think you don't do so well juggling.

Maybe you should finish angel of mine, cuz this story and Naga king suck.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
My Complaints

1. But still...I mean since they left Violet's fake family in chapter 2 there has been little exciting plot development.

Unlike some of the other posters, I understood where you were going with the whole something is not right with her real parents, once the whole doppelganger bit was revealed. (obviously Slyvie or whoever is in on it) But still there has not been actual excitement since chapter 2. Not even in this most recent chapter...in my opinion

2. I really did not like the whole "surprise your not human" event that happened in chapter 3A. I mean i called she was not entirely human before that, but it was much more dramatic when her origins were mysterious. Like look, "Someone has been keeping an eye on her since she was a kid, she's probably some demon's byblow, or something." I thought that was a hot idea.

3.The whole oh your my true love = fated mate shit is soooo overdone. Why can't it be, "damn. I get the feeling you'd be a good mother to my kids. Bear my Children."

4.Your supernatural creativity is subpar. If you want an example of some originality read "Demonic Submission" on this site. Think its written by TheChaosLord.

5. In chapter 1 or 2 you menton AJ.'s alter ego has temporal powers. I find that to be completely lame. Oh not that temporal powers are lame, its just a lame power to give a character. Unimaginative.

Just calling it as I see it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
I demand more!

Please finish the story im dying to know what happens!!

LoveeLoveeover 10 years ago
Wating to find out

What Happens next! Hope you don't abandon the

Story like a lot of writers on here do. I personally like the plot line.

The only thing I would encourage from you is to find twist other than kidnapping in your stories. It is becoming preditable being it is in several stories. Other that, power the computer up and type on your audience is waiting!

TattoobaabyTattoobaabyover 10 years ago
Pleeeeease finish !

Please finish this story !

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
please...please....finish this story!!!

I really love this story read it about five time waiting for you to post next chapter. ..m..please dont listen to anyone who tells you not to finish this GREAT story. ..

countrygirlflacountrygirlflaabout 10 years ago
IS THE YET ANOTHER UNFINISHED STORY

Well,been since sept 2013,,since you last posted,so,either you had problems,writers block,,or just are not going to finish it,,like so many other writers,,,was a good start,sucks that this seems to be it,,,,

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
I just want to know

I don't even care about the lack of sex, I just want to know what happens to them! Also, I stayed up way too late reading the whole story, it sucked me in.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
WANT MORE OR MUST I SAY I NEED MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I really need more can't wait for the next chapter's..........:)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
please

More!!

countrygirlflacountrygirlflaabout 10 years ago
ENDING???????????????

A good story,,but 6 months since your last post,,,,writers block???,of just gave up,good while it lasted,,

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Still waiting

I love this storie so much I have read it twice last time was six months ago I was hopping you would of put more up by now it is writes block or your to busy or just gave up I hope you haven't I would of really loves to see what happens hope you upload soon

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Don't stop now

What happens next???? I'm in love with the story, don't leave us hangin for to long.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

Please keep writing, this story is amazing <3 :)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Story

Why stop now????????

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Love this story

Please, Please, Please finish this story; it's so good.

CandyKDCandyKDover 9 years ago
MORE

Patiently waiting

Very enjoyable read

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Well?????

I see on your lists you've wrote 4 other stories since you posted this one.. A YEAR AGO when are you going to finish it?? :(

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
PLEASE KEEP WRITING; ESPECIALLY THIS SERIES!

Hi umm just started reading this series yesterday and I'm already done. I'm like upset now that there isn't another one so PLEASE KEEP WRITING! I need this in my life :( I loved your stories like, so much, I almost cried. They were so good they didn't even need sex in them (don't get me wrong it's a good thing to have). You should SERIOUSLY consider becoming a writer. But before that please finish this series so I can STOP OBSESSING WITH THIS !!! Just a few cool tips for ya (: thanks X3

barbette_sgbarbette_sgalmost 9 years ago

I'm not disappointed with the lack of sex in the story. What I'm disappointed about is that yer not continuing:(

I hope you get back and finish the story. I really wanna know what happens to Vi and the baby and the boys and everything else. Please continue. Thanks :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Please continue with the storie.

wolfgirl08wolfgirl08about 8 years ago
Update

When is the next chapter coming out?

I read this in one day and cannot wait for the next one.

Please post something soon....

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago

Really liked this story can't wait to read more

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Weird

Loved this story up to this point. But this has gotten too weird and confusing to keep up with. I'm out.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago

Little confusing at this point but I have loved it so farmer hope things start to make sense soon. When is the next part coming out?

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Please continue

The title says it all

poreyb1999poreyb1999about 7 years ago
Well

So cliff hangers can be a good thing, they build up tension but to leave a cliffhanger for almost 4 year's, that's bad. So here's a question I would like to ask, are you dead?

wifeslaveslutwifeslaveslutover 6 years ago
Hello?

When are you going to finish this series?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
So about 5 years... still waiting

This seems like a great story without a ending its like eating a hamburger with out a drink ur semi satisfied but just want something more

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

Great story keep it up we miss u!

StormyRidgeStormyRidgeover 2 years ago

I really love this series, yet please tell me you have nearly finished the next one. I'm on tether hooks waiting

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Depressing to see this was from 2013 and there is no part 5. Cliffhanger was an understatement.

AnonymousAnonymous3 days ago

Please finish.

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