.......... that setting this in the Orient would make it more entertaining?
Or was it just an ego trip, trying to give the impression that you actually know something about the east, when the closest you've been is probably a Chinese restaurant?
Even the names were unrealistic.
Flowery euphemisms can never replace substance in a story, and this drivel had too much of one and none of the other.
About the only saving grace was that it took only one page. Any more would have been Chinese torture.
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Anonymous10/04/13
What a good story.
Ignore all the previous comments, this is quite a good story. These people seem to forget that it is a work of fiction. Keep on writing and improve with each story! And ignore all the idiots who can't tell fiction from fact and degrade other people efforts!
English
Total fucking rubbish
Dont bother writing any more
Did you really think.....
.......... that setting this in the Orient would make it more entertaining?
Or was it just an ego trip, trying to give the impression that you actually know something about the east, when the closest you've been is probably a Chinese restaurant?
Even the names were unrealistic.
Flowery euphemisms can never replace substance in a story, and this drivel had too much of one and none of the other.
About the only saving grace was that it took only one page. Any more would have been Chinese torture.
What a good story.
Ignore all the previous comments, this is quite a good story. These people seem to forget that it is a work of fiction. Keep on writing and improve with each story! And ignore all the idiots who can't tell fiction from fact and degrade other people efforts!
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